You in my world

As I remain all that exists of me
I am my own universe
As I represent myself as my own nation
Lord Kitchener shows no hesitation as to say I need you

I need you
I need you to fulfill my desire
which rivals my basic need for air to breathe
I do not know how
But you've managed to become the spiraling centre of my universe
Like gravity
Compelling my weep, my glee and everything infatuated with everything I want even if it's not what I need

Tears trickling down my cheek
Being brought to tears just by the image of you projected to my mind
Without any doubt of your majesty

I'm oblivious
I've been rendered speechless
But that is a comic price to pay
If it allows you to fall into my arms

Reviews

[blueseeker]

mmm, a great write. love is very powerful yet, so delicate. every stage, every moment is percieved differently. feelings amongts one another change constantly. thanks for the write.

[MOON]

I like your first paragraph and well the comic price to pay that’s quite a line. Very good .

[Igor G. Balatsky]

Love is a kind of obsession. We often don't know what we need.
That is a nice piece. Thank you for sharing, Jayren.

[closed..acct]

Such a wonderful write, kind of romantic.

[Hayley]

I like the rhythm of this piece; it's romantic yet contemplative. I particularly like the last stanza because it's a perfect ending, and so satisfying.
Oh and one last thing, I think you mean "fulfill" in the first line of the second stanza.. other than that, great work!

[Diane]

To be able to fall into the arms of love...sigh. I think you have mastered love and beauty with this piece.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

NICE!! This is breathtaking...

"Tears trickling down my cheek; being brought to tears just by
the image of you projected to my mind without any doubt of your beauty.
I'm oblivious that I've been rendered speechless, but that's a comic price to pay, if it allows you to fall into my arms."

~ The surrender is truly felt as I read this last stanza...and the last verse takes my breath away~

[Davey Jones]

Romantic is all I can say

[Bare trees]

Your words are so colorful and expressive. This is a very creative way of expressing your thoughts for another with the pen of desire. Great poem.