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Two friends, lovers and loners in a world of hypocrisy, just a message from one of them to the other throughout rebel, boldness & uniqueness

Close your eyes…

Whisper my name

Take my hands, teach me how to fly; otherwise

I'd sell my soul to the devil, I'd offer my body to the cannibals; I'd sacrifice…

I'd teach you, to listen to the sound of the waves, to watch the birds swaying in the dark blue sky; otherwise

You'd teach me how to live, how to change the truth & the lies…

It's cold, chilling to the bone, on this lonely afternoon…

So teach me how to break free from the burden of the deep blue eyes & silver skies, in your gaze

Otherwise, I'd teach you how to march with petals, for you I'll memorize,
my faults, my dreams & cries…

Save me, I can't tell the wrong from the right, the day from the night

I can't find the answers, I can't compromise; otherwise

I'd burn the weeds of wisdom, I'd carry the world on my shoulders, I'd walk alone, head up & die…

So Close your eyes…

Whisper my name

Take my hand, I'll teach you where to land

When to fly…

Reviews

[PureAbstrakt]

Beautiful and powerful choice of words, they could work like a spell, almost... One single note: isn't the meaning of your first "otherwise" different from the following ones? Did you mean it like that? Keep writing!

[Kendall Edison]

I love this its amazing!

[Anthony Thomas]

I like this. It is a very interesting style. My favorite lines are

"Otherwise, I'd teach you how to march with petals, for you I'll memorize,
my faults, my dreams & cries"

[Conner G]

This was a pretty neat poem. Some good phrases stick out, keep going and keep writing!