Silent Disrespect

In silence,

there is a message

Louder than any non-utterance.

No words could ever be so cruel.

Word Demon Gone Mute,

This skin is soft to touch,

Yet impenetrable to your sword

Which now withers in hand.

The visage slipped,

Your craven ways show true--

Risk of confrontation, your defeat.

May it crown your head.

Inevitable endpoint shown

Clear in your armor 'til glare blinded you.

That sound was my shield going up,

Not my heart breaking.

Black bile infects

Killing your romantic posies

In undercurrents of blood and thought

You try to disguise and normalize.

Disrespect stands,

Coldly; quietly as a breakfront

Keeping warm winds of friendship at bay.

Never will before come again.

Reviews

[Ben Noah Suri]

Well said.... Silence is indeed a very negative and disrespectful response....

[JayceeC]

Welcome to my work! Thanks for stopping by to read, and leave a comment.

[sinNsincerity]

This is such a harsh thing to experience. We do get good a building defense mechanism when necessary.
excellent writ Jan.

[JayceeC]

Thanks for stopping by to read, your comments are always appreciated.

[AaronFreitas]

You couldn't have said it any better... silence is more frustrating and hurtful than any words can be. It's almost a sign of giving up on someone and erasing what they were to you. Loved the words you used to describe this my friend :)

[JayceeC]

Thanks Aaron! Erasing history is so painful because no matter how hard you scrub, it's impossible.

[Perkele.7885]

I am uncomfortable with the very last line. It does not roll off my tongue easy as I am finishing the read orally. Perhaps, if you were to throw a comma in there to indicate a break in the speech pattern, it might flow easier. The write itself is profound and perhaps a heavy read for those weak in English.

[JayceeC]

I will definitely look at that line. This pie e is purposefully allegorical, so language learners may struggle, but that happens anytime you read in a second language. Thanks for your take on it.

[Perkele.7885]

You are certainly welcome. I have become more comfortable with that finishing line the more that I read your piece but, I will stick with my first observation.

[JayceeC]

It's the order of words, I could change it to "Before will never come again" but then the word Before is more important than Never. Still hashing it out in my brain, and playing with my copy.

[Perkele.7885]

It is your poetry dear one!

[wordman]

a sad write jc,friend ship should be sacred

[JayceeC]

Yep, but people torpedo it all the time.

[wordman]

well yes of course,it`s always people

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, "never will before come again"

great line...once we betray a friendship....that trust is forever broken...and the silence between the two really becomes deafening...it becomes a roar.

[JayceeC]

Indeed it does, sad really. Thanks for dropping in Jacob, I always enjoy your take.

[....................]

these are true words, Jan... silence is a weapon much sharper than a sword and there is nothing more devastating and disrespectful than silence...you had me at the first four lines - clever and profound...well done...

[JayceeC]

Raj wrote on this topic earlier in the week. I'm too direct for guessing games, and the run around just engages my defence mechanisms. If there is a problem, people should indicate it with more than cool politeness or a shoulder. Unresolved issues can become a problem for both parties. There are somethings you can't undo.

[....................]

I agree with all of this, Jan... if people were more direct at confronting issues with one another people can move forward... very well-said!