Headstrong Lover

Septet II form--Carpe Diem

Do Not Turn

Away from me now

When love is new and thrilling.

Nevermore, passion's flame flares untamed--

Hearts blindly lead the willing

Journey--unsurpassed.

CAUTION burns!

Author's Note

This is a current contest piece written for another site in Spetet II form which basically is an English form consisting of a 7 line write that follows the syllable pattern of 3-5-7-9-7-5-3. No rhyme scheme is necessary.

This is just a passing nod to some of my faves John Donne, Christopher Marlowe, Robert Herrick and Robert Browning..they did passion well.

Now you know the rules, you can try it on your own.

Reviews

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There is no greater burning than the fire of passion - the unrestricted desire that, once unleashed, is difficult to control... this piece fits the title very, very well and those opening lines - with their demanding tone - clearly let the reader know that this is not some dilly-dallying crush in need of a quick fix; no, this is something that is far more explosive...

I love the play on 'blind leading the willing' - it's tough being the willing and having to watch as the blind lover bumbles about, not really understanding the desires of want... those burning needs...

...and yes, passion is, indeed, an unsurpassed journey that requires a cautionary sign...

I really felt the heat in this one, Jan, as well as the chill... and, I love the form.

Well-done!

[JayceeC]

Thomas, Thank you for this excellent review! You addressed the one thing I've been dilly dallying over, the Title. I'm never quite sure I like them. I also haven't decided it you guys are just so used to reading my passion pieces that you expect hot so that's what is read, or if I just don't recognize how much heat I put into a piece anymore. XD
Now that you have the form, I expect to see at least one Thomas!

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You are kindly welcome, Jan, and I never expect anything - I always read what is there and it is the write that garners the response.

Yes, I will try one, after I am done with my botanical piece :)

[JayceeC]

HMMM Interesting--Your objectivity indicates that I'm not always recognizing all the elements I'm putting into my writing. That does not surprise me to much as I just start writing with an idea, and the rest happens with a little bit of edit.
Glad you are writing the botanical DO NOT Send a RR. I will pick it up from contest!

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Yes, on the last comment...

[ANTO]

I like it. Its new to me but I love that you keep introducing us to new forms and styles my friend. It really keeps the grey matter busy.
The poem is like a 50 shades-esque kind of write. Domineering to a point but more like - look this is how its going to be, either you jump in with both feet or you'll get hurt.
Very strong and very enjoyable to imagine. Thanks for sharing this one JayceeC

[JayceeC]

Anto I love that most people see this in modern terms when most of the poets that inspired it are 16th century poets. Granted the Elizabethan era was a bit loose, but the themes are those of "Gather thee rosebuds.."(Herricks) "Come with me and be my love.." (both Marlowe and Donne) “how sad and bad and mad it was - but then, how it was sweet” (Browning)
We did not event sensual poetry, in fact if you ever get past the language these guys wrote some racy stuff..the 50 shades of their day.

and I try to introduce the simpler forms where syllable count is all that matters. They are the easiest to start with.

[ANTO]

I left school when I was 16 (sorriest thing I ever did) but took an interest in Shakespeare with me which I havent lost but also havent nurtured but its there, at least...lol

That sounds like a great system. I just subbed and look forward to an education because I'll be here forever lol. Thank you.

[Perkele.7885]

Seems like you are giving all prospective lovers,fair warning! There can be no snivelers later on. Good and fair warning!

[JayceeC]

Passion comes and goes so grab on a ride to the end..these were the lessons to some of my favorite poets...oh and that woman is fickle...but no need mentioning that.