Whispers

Fibonacci

Warm
Breath
Covers
Milky skin
Warming me inside
Suffusing my body with joy.
Every cell reaches toward you and shivers in glee.
Anticipation knows no bounds as you whisper across my skin and desire ignites.

Reviews

[Carrie.]

"Whisper accross my skin", wonderful. This style really suits you.

[JayceeC]

Thought you might like that after looking at Auditory..LOL :-)
Actually my brain seems able to deal with some type of structure better than free verse right now, but cannot quite focus enough for sonnets.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of words. A nice journey in your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[JayceeC]

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[613]

Whoa, great work! You manage to capture every sensual aspect of a sexual act during each beautiful step. Fantastic job.

- Brittney

[JayceeC]

Thanks Brittney! This is a newer form for me

[613]

You're welcome! You did a great job.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

great tease..........
extremely sensual........
amazing as always!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[JayceeC]

Thanks P. Always like yo see you here. You day the nicest things

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!...........you are welcome.............well i am amazing!!! lol :D :D

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Jaycee, this is beautifully sensual poetry :)

[JayceeC]

Thamk you lynn

[jeannemarie coulter]

excellent penning...the shape adds to the understand of touch moving across flesh...well done...

[JayceeC]

Thanks...This will not be the last I pen in this form.

[RiverRei]

Reading through it, I can picture this situation with my man and how he does this with me sometimes. I'm now sitting at work a little turned on because of the memory you brought to my mind lol. Thanks for that ;P I love the format though; starts out with one word and branches out as desire intensifies. A wonderfully worded and constructed poem. Thank you for sharing this with me! :) You're an inspiration :D

[JayceeC]

LOL you should always beware when you come to my page at work...although this is definitely on the mild side for me. Your response made me smile. You should try Fibonacci it's not really hard, its all about syllable counts. 1,1,2,3,5,8,13,21 You just keep adding the number of syllables form the last two lines to get the count of the new line. I sometimes have trouble in my first three because I like my third line to look longer than the first two and it does not always happen. :-(

[RiverRei]

I know how you feel, it took me a long time to get used to the fact my lines aren't always going to be pretty like I want them to be lol. I'll definitely keep that in mind though. If it's done right (as yours is!), the Fibonacci sequence can make for a wonderfully exhilarating poem :)

[BougaTimeBongo]

I love this. Simple, short, and sexy. I think the tease of knowing what's coming but never really getting there and still knowing the getting there was totally worth it, is fun and it's what you've done here. Additionally, great use of the Fibonacci format. :) Me likes.

[JayceeC]

Thanks BTB. By now you should know I think a little bit of mystery or imagination is a lot sexier than the blatant, although that can have it's place too. ;-)

[BougaTimeBongo]

Absolutely!

[AaronFreitas]

What a sexy write :) Loved it!

[JayceeC]

Thanks Aaron {:-)

[Elan Vital 23]

The warm breath of life can be so sensual. Breathing life into each other.

Bruce

PS: Intriguing that your syllable count is a Fibonacci sequence. Leave it to a teacher to put on such displays.

[JayceeC]

Well math teacher at that...lol. Really just trying to expand my repertoire and this looked easier than some. Plus I like the visuals of Fibonacci.

[Elan Vital 23]

Yes so many things in nature reflect Fibonacci.