Full Bloom

Author's Note

Yes I know Haiku has not titles, but how would we keep them apart

Reviews

[Jibey]

Roses are so sensual...

Mine effort is not a haiku but the spirit is in tune with yours:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Jibey/401654/

[Wicahpi]

Beautiful! Well done with the given set of rules in this Three Line contest.

[JayceeC]

Thank you. This is actually one of my faves. I'm glad you could appreciate it.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Here is a good example of learning all the rules and breaking them beautifully, because you can. You have blended both what is human and what is nature and made it human nature.

[JayceeC]

This is my which is it haiku/senryu poem so yes nature vs human condition...or both. So now Nadia how dare you accuse me of breaking rules...lol

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

hahaha sorry m'am i just wanted to imagine you as a bad girl lol

[JayceeC]

Lol .have you read the new one...plenty already thinking that..oh well never minded breaking the rules..just call it innovation. ..lol

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

YES innovation! that's the word i was looking for ;)

[Samuel Dickens]

I know this analogy of woman as flower has been made many times, but it's one that I heartily embrace, and have employed in my own writing a time or two. Remembering when I was young, the flowers of spring seemed side by side with all the lovely girls, just shed of their winter garb and dressed in colorful, airy clothes. Your few words capture that exceedingly well.

[JayceeC]

Oh but is it really a woman? I think one of my favorite things about this as I keep looking back on it is that as a reader, you take it as you want. Haiku--totally nature based. Senryu--about human condition or societal issues. This is a blend of both. perhaps I will add two and make it a Tanka..I often do..we'll see how the day goes. ;-)

[Samuel Dickens]

I think I'm probably hardwired to see it this way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i title my haiku and senryu also...the hell with the damn rules...as emily dickinson often said and did...rules are meant to violated.

i really like this haiku...because it could also be senryu if we think of the rose as a woman...

a perfect blossom...but be careful..even with that softness and openness there are thorns to be dealt with.

[JayceeC]

There are always thorns in life, but if we worrybtoo much we miss the beauty.

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A beautiful haiku. I believe anything goes nowadays when it comes to the strictness of form - it's a beautiful title befitting the proceeding words.

[JayceeC]

If you see this as an actual rose its haiku if you see it as other it is Senryu. I really should post the picture, but maybe I'l leave it as is. I like things that are open for interpretation. So yes, I've even seen modern "Haiku" that allows more syllables usually 6 and 8 but keeps the 17-21 syllable write. They too are considered haiku/senryu in the modern tradition. I however an more of a purist than that. I like my lines of 5 an 7. Thanks for stopping by. we were reviewing at the same time. ~Jan

[Chris]

the essence of feminine... a well formed work.

Titles are allowed

[JayceeC]

Western Haiku have titles, but the Japanese tradition says not and some purist say not. I say I don't care. Yes it is an acceptable practice and one I embrace.
It really was a rose I received from a student today but it amused me more with the word her, for aren't roses a feminine flower..or is that a lily. Thanks for posting Chris.

[Chris]

The rose is a male's feminine wish... least to me

[JayceeC]

Lol yes and that why I changed the to her in the first line and grinned this morning as I wrote...lol

[Chris]

it came close to being a Senryu...but the last line decided it for me.

[JayceeC]

I decided to post the pic. it was a surprise from a student first thing this morning. I love cabbage roses. Was a florist for 15 years but there was never a rose that entered the shop that could hold a candle to a fresh garden rose.

[Chris]

grown enmasse and grown with intent are two different things...one hopes the plants are aware enough to sense a difference.

[JayceeC]

Shop roses are so hybridized for pest reduction, perfect shape, perfect color, few thorns, that they are scentless. The best ones are a bit old fashioned "heirloom" roses, although I've found a few new ones that I love, too.