take her home

Don’t

            eat the woman in your den

            tear her clothes

            rob her jewels

            taste her blood

            drink her sweat

            beat her dead

 

DON’T EAT THE WOMAN IN YOUR DEN

 

BUT

take her home.

 

Don’t

 

            eat the woman in your den

            poison her in the milk she boils

douse her in the fire she cooks

freeze her in the ice cream she freezes

sweep her away with the dust she cleans

wash her away with the clothes she washes

 

DON’T EAT THE WOMAN IN YOUR DEN

 

BUT

 

take her home

 

Take her not to your house

but Home

she’s tired

cool her

not with

an air conditioner

but with

your sweet

gentle breath

 

Don’t

            adorn her with jewels

But

embellish with love words

 

oh! take her home

she is deadly tired.

 

Reviews

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I liked this very much. It's straight forward, yet open to interpretation. I like your use of caps and enjambment. Sometimes I forget caps are an emphasis option - thanks for the reminder. This was WELL written. :) "sweep her..." was my fav.

[Angel Marie Antoinette]

I like a lot of these poems...it would have been easier to judge them by themselves (you can always change that)...I think your writing is beautiful...I've always been a fan of Indian writers and I hope to see more from you.

[Craig Johnson]

so, I like alot of the things that i see here. Especially some of the ideas being expressed. The words however seem to trip over themselves or my tongue, it seems to be almost a bit to wordy, like it would be possible to better express things with fewer words. Keep it up i hope to see more.

[Craig Johnson]

so, I like alot of the things that i see here. Especially some of the ideas being expressed. The words however seem to trip over themselves or my tongue, it seems to be almost a bit to wordy, like it would be possible to better express things with fewer words. Keep it up i hope to see more.