To Fall And To Faulter

When you finally concede that a relationship is failing

I'm sorry but we're in the twilight of our days
We're dancing to the last song
We're dancing for what remains
I'm broken but I want to take a casualty
We've endured for way too long
We've broke the tracks for this train

This is where we jump and fall in the fault
This is where we go to die
This is where we freeze in the cold
Where the legacy of love seems to lie

I'm here and ready for the last of our love
We're jumping from the top now
We're afraid of living on from this day
I'm just too busy, pushing you away
I'm alone but too stubborn to change

This is where we jump and fall in the fault
This is where we go to die
This is where we freeze in the cold
Where the legacy of love seems to lie

Reviews

[GirlOnFire]

i love this poetry of yours, I love the message ..

Its something that i cant explain..

Each word hits me
specially this Lines

We're jumping from the top now
We're afraid of living on from
this day
I'm just too busy, pushing you
away
I'm alone but too stubborn to
change
This is where we jump and fall in the fault

[Michael G. Smith]

I won't let this happen too my marriage. I'll make my duty to keep our lives spiced.

[Lexi Villanueva]

The ending is brilliant such beauty and
Charisma I love it and so wonderfully done!
-100

[Rafia ~ Yellow Girl]

I enjoyed the flow and rhythm but moreover i loved the simplicity of thoughts through out.. Do share more.

[allura]

this poem of yours.. it is truly unique, and i quite like it.

[Pryde Foltz]

I'm just too busy, pushing you away
I'm alone but too stubborn to change

I hate to quibble--okay maybe I love to. lol--but I think stubborn is only a cloak for fear. Loved the musicality of this write.

[RainDancer1997]

Sad piece can also be depressing. I get your drift though:) great job

[shallimarRose]

JJ this is so sad... This is where love goes to die perhaps.. I felt this piece deeply.. If love is real you don't give up on it.. great poem.. shallimarRose

[Simon Welsh]

Kickass as usual dude! Nicely written.

[FateDictates]

really love this work...your mind so made up...