My Soul To The Waters

About someone, whom has been given a second chance in life and is struggling to decide whether to take it

I’m trapped, weighed down by an anchor of drug-fuelled pressures

I need a messiah or a silver lining

For I have no family, no house to call home

Between the grey of life and the end, I’m still deciding

Should I exist as a shadow or finally die alone

 

I’ll cease to speak as the venom courses through me

I’ll beg for it to be the final time

 

Enough is enough

I shall commend my corpse for the waters

There are no sweet words or epitaphs for me

I’ll give my life to others judge

 

The colours swimming around my eyes fading to black

I’m on the threshold of peaceful death

But what shakes me awake, to drag me back to life?

The only decision I ever made snatched away

Is this is a punishment, or a salvation happening tonight?

 

I’ll begin to plead for a stronger dose now

This time I’ll get it right

 

Enough is enough

I shall commend my corpse for the waters

There are no sweet words or epitaphs for me

I’ll give my life to others judge

 

Does this story end as it should’ve done

Or can I let a stolen life truly run

Turn the toxins from my diseased body

Am I blessed or cursed to have my tattered soul

To be living under the glow of the sun

Reviews

[K.S.78]

I cant even begin to tell you what I liked most about this poem. I find it to be so honest and very much from personal turmoil, because nobody could write something as beautifully tragic without having gone through something like this themselves. Really great writing imagery, I would say this is one of my absolute favorites. In fact would you mind if I re-blogged it on my wordpress? Let me know and again just wonderful!

[JayJayBlue]

Hey, sorry about the late response, that'd be absolutely fine if you want to re-blog it :) And to an extent I was drawing from a personal (and albeit, rather bleak perspective)

[allura]

I absolutely adore this poem! It takes me back to sad and similar time in my life,
Death always seemed the easy route, over glorified really, Living will by far be the best and worst thing I ever chose to do! And I shall enjoy or despise every moment of it!
any way, enough of rambling on!
Beautifully written!!

[The Girl That Let You G..]

This write was so powerful, it really hits the reader full force. Amazing write.

[Graveyardfuck]

I looooooove this. The order of the stanzas is perfect and the rhyme scheme is too. The story behind it is good too. Love it!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Enough is enough
I shall commend my corpse for the waters (perhaps "commit")
There are no sweet epitaphs for me

These lines really hit me. A sad thought that we are all just living to die, eventually. Still, it is in the living that we must flourish and broker our own destinies, right? Well done on concept; a little choppy at times in flow, but overall very nice.

[JayJayBlue]

Thank you for the review :)
In all honesty I was wondering if 'commit' was a better choice of word. And you're right on the concept, it's about being given a second chance to do what you will, whether you use it to save yourself of destroy yourself is up to the individual

[Simon Welsh]

Life is the time wasted before you die... if that's how you see it ;) good work man.

[JayJayBlue]

You could argue death is a release for some, and thank you for the nice words pal :)