Life

A friend remarked that no matter how hard she tries, she can’t win. That got me thinking about life, mortality, and the old saying, “Life sucks…and then you die. This is the result:

Life is just a Red Queen’s race

You run and run to stay in place.

 

The road is long, the surface rough.

Your very best?  It’s just enough.

 

Each day a struggle, each a war.

With not a clue of what’s in store

 

But that’s okay, and I don’t mind

‘Cause Death, he marks the finish line.

Author's Note

Just for fun.

Reviews

[Baz]

This is exactly kind of poetry. Succinct, well metered and rhymed, and a good pay off at the end. More please.

[ETERNITY]

After reading some of the other opinions, it makes me hesitate to review. I thought we are trying to assist fellow writers to improve or at least have a say in how we believe the writing can be better approached. Now I know why I had taken a break from this site.
My opinion of Life by JayG? I like it better without the subtitle about the friend. it comes on strong and seems to deter the reader from taking an interest in Life. However, the ending revs up the hope there might be something better. I like the sarcastic finish.

[JayG]

Here's a funny one: The member, apennylate, who commented, below, once wrote decent poetry. in 2017, she used to get pages of comment for her work. But then, she was gone for seven years.

Obviously, something traumatic happened, because she returned with a slew of angry and disjointed poems that resembled the work of Bunthorn, the pretentious poet from Gilbert and Sullivan's operetta, Patience.

And because I, unaware of her trauma, dared point out the problems, she's declared war, and is pasting repetitive "reviews" of my work, never even reading it. Here, she ignores the work and simple hijacks the thread for her own screed.

She's deleted ALL of her latest offerings, so she recognizes the truth of the suggestions I made. But obviously, her condition is such that she feels she must "punish me" by lashing out like a child.

She seems a few pence short of a pound these days. I should block her, but running around gnashing her teeth and posting gives her something to do, I suppose.

[apennylate]

Also... Here, JayG...
Since you are so keen on enforcing "professional" critiques on writers who literally did not ask for them...
https://www.reddit.com/r/poetry_critics/?rdt=58594
That is a link to a reddit page with MANY avid critics, like yourself!
Plus, your behavior is not only encouraged, it is mandated to even post/join!
So why stir up all this trouble, if you TRULY aim only to help less fortunate writers than yourself...
Pages that writers actually ASK for your critiques exist! GO TO THEM!
It might just be one of the MOST PRODUCTIVE ways you could go about doing... Whatever it is you believe in your heart of hearts you are accomplishing by trolling new writers on a dead poetry site.
God bless, and cheers!

[Philip Gaber]

And not only that, he marks it with invisible, so you don't know where it starts and finishes. Cruel b*****d.

[alexAlexander]

It's just for fun, while my life is on the run, and run to stay in place. Each day is a struggle, each a war. But that's ok, I don't mind. I'll try to enjoy the journey, anyway.

[FlaLover]

I like this! So true in many ways. Even though life is tough sometimes it definitely beats the alternative

[John Sullivan]

Great little piece, very existential.

[Sharrumkin]

Fun it is. Reminds me of short 19th century American comic verses.