When You See a Stranger

A bit of silliness for the kids. Prosody is a bit off and there are inconsistencies stanza-to-stanza, but luckily, kids don't notice

When You See a Stranger

A question for kids

 

 

You see a stranger on the street

Where would you go, if you wore his feet?

 

Is he kind to his children? Is he nice to his wife?

Or is his day troubled…and filled with strife?

 

With what kind of treat does he end his meal?

Is it ice cream and pie, or crackers with eel?

 

Is reddish purple his favorite hue?

Or greenish red, all mixed with blue?

 

Does he drive a car or row a boat?

Fly an eagle…or ride a goat?

 

How does he get where he hopes to be?

Perhaps he swings from tree-to-tree?

 

Is his family nice or zombie-esque?

Do they call to talk or only text?

 

Do they read a book or do they dance?

When danger calls do they take a chance?

 

But, asking that, a thought occurs.

Would they like your world?

Would you like theirs?

Reviews

[Scott888]

I love this poem it is very psychological and ask the pertinent question of are we living our lives to fullest. The way it is formatted is very good because it lets the reader ponder about it and then gives the final message and question which untimely gets the reader thinking about their life. Great poem.

[fallon]

"you see a stranger on the street. Where would you go if you wore his feet?" That says it all for me. I was already hooked on the first line. In fact I think I may start asking my children this question to see what they come up with. Its charming and inquisitive. Thank you for sharing it.

[Arundass TP]

Even the title of the poem is powerful. Excellent poem

[Coffee Vampier]

I've read this a few times now... as an edit some people read it backwards. Still calming but better read one line at a time.

[Celie Rose]

Kids may never know they are being watched. There are predators out there looking for victims. Good rhythm, rhyme and flow. Well written and expressed.

[Unforgivable]

I love the way you used interesting rhymes! It made the poem flow very smoothly.

[Troy Henson]

Wordplay at its finest. Imagination freely exploring ones thoughts. Great imagery throughout and a thought provoking piece....are we often curious as to what others have or are we wanting others to be envious of ourselves.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is very imaginative and playful. The way you use rhymes and wordplay to explore the idea of empathy and understanding is very clever, and I can feel the sense of curiosity and wonder that comes with imagining what it would be like to be someone else. The final lines of the poem are particularly thought-provoking, as they raise the question of whether our own world is one that others would want to be a part of.

[Marugō rorēnu]

just when the mind starts to be curious, it could just go as far as it likes. I like this, simply beautiful :)

[Coffee Vampier]

Ask for their number and then you might make a new friend.