Terra Infirma

Here you go, Ivy... a repost of my old featured which I'll feature again, what the hell. You did ask, haha. Redone Evoca track. The track down the bottom is mixed with a little ditty I was making up at the time on a nylon acoustic. Terrible quality. Yup.

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The earth can seem too deep at times,
as boulders rush over gravel and termites
lay eggs in fields of promises; blooms

of violence cut back with rusty secateurs
under a moon-song of rivers drying up
in their featherdown beds.


We've all grown... some in the most
flagrant ways harpooned upon a beach,
some like Reznor's downward spiral

into oblivion: for that first urge making
you throw your fingers wide to write
of all the troubles in your prismatic life.


Stanzaic: there's order amongst the revival
of fallen gypsy castles, tidal-blown under
the restraints of etiquette, familiarity

and soul sacrifice; emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over.


And this is
just how I want it.



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Author's Note

Shitty guitar, I know. I stuff around now, that's pretty much it.
Photo of a cool waterfall/open cave at a beach near where I live.
Yep, I like the whole audio-visual-written palette, I guess.

Reviews

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

I thought I'd already reviewied this one but evidently not! This is a terrific bit of work - very organic. There's also something vaguely sci-fi about your imagery: eggs in fields, downward spirals and prismatic life. It conjurs a War of the Worlds kind of scenario, though perhaps that's just my imagination.

[William J. Wilkins]

I'm going to have make trip back to hear this legendary voice (evoca bombs for me sometimes), but I don't need the voice to know I love this poem.

I love the notion I'm getting of humanity wasting away in the falsehoods of piety and polite society, missing the sheer primal joy of just *being* for the sake of stanzaic lives. Bleh.

Bravo for this. Fave.

[Misha London]

just stopping by to read this again.
still a fave!
;)

[Mélisande]

It�s true.

You�re a sexy biatch. That voice, that accent�you could be the crudest motha-f***a around but I�d still swoon.

But moving on�actually, I don�t have very far to move onto because I can�t really find anything to nit-pick. So I�ll go second best and

discuss.

What�s really intriguing about this write is the way that it moves from one thing to the next. They�re unrelated images and you don�t bother to make connections between them, just with what you�re saying. Your focus on the end, the black spot on the banana, etc. stays circulated but interestingly detached. Am I not making sense yet?

My favorite part was the movement here:

�We've all grown... some in the most
flagrant ways harpooned upon a beach,
some like Reznor's downward spiral

into oblivion:��

From the image of a beached whale, the exhaustion and pain of being harpooned, to Reznor!?!

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Awesome. Intensely, because I found it�oceanic, spiral down into the deep blue.

I tried that once.

Great write.

-Emeya

[Wendy G.]

the guest comment below was mine . . . i wasn't logged in- oops

[Li Li]

Your way with words has always amazed me.....and to hear your voice speak this really had me impressed even more.. Love the accent...I could sit and listen to you rant and ramble any time.

[L. L. Jacobson]

And this is
just how I want it.

PROFOUND.


........and I don't know what's more amazing: your words or your voice.
The atmosphere would be at a loss without your infinite talent existing in its realm.

[Candid Writer]

This is a beautiful piece. Filled with gentle words and flows nicely. And the Evoca added a special touch - the tone of the written poem truly matched the way you recited it.

Great Job.

[Hawksmoor]

You know what, man? I aint even gonna lie like a pompous a*s and say that I understood all of this. But what I did understand was f****n beautiful. Bra f****n vo.

Oh, and the latest name is cool. LOL.

Hawksmoor...From The Bleed.

[Mark]

"secateurs , featherdown, & Stanzaic are not words."

lol...

I love the word stanzaic. :)

I liked this piece, expecially the end-

"emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over. "

[Blair W Massa]

Beautiful and lashing. Tragic in its own sense. I love this. Good work.