Terra Infirma

Here you go, Ivy... a repost of my old featured which I'll feature again, what the hell. You did ask, haha. Redone Evoca track. The track down the bottom is mixed with a little ditty I was making up at the time on a nylon acoustic. Terrible quality. Yup.

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The earth can seem too deep at times,
as boulders rush over gravel and termites
lay eggs in fields of promises; blooms

of violence cut back with rusty secateurs
under a moon-song of rivers drying up
in their featherdown beds.


We've all grown... some in the most
flagrant ways harpooned upon a beach,
some like Reznor's downward spiral

into oblivion: for that first urge making
you throw your fingers wide to write
of all the troubles in your prismatic life.


Stanzaic: there's order amongst the revival
of fallen gypsy castles, tidal-blown under
the restraints of etiquette, familiarity

and soul sacrifice; emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over.


And this is
just how I want it.



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Author's Note

Shitty guitar, I know. I stuff around now, that's pretty much it.
Photo of a cool waterfall/open cave at a beach near where I live.
Yep, I like the whole audio-visual-written palette, I guess.

Reviews

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

I thought I'd already reviewied this one but evidently not! This is a terrific bit of work - very organic. There's also something vaguely sci-fi about your imagery: eggs in fields, downward spirals and prismatic life. It conjurs a War of the Worlds kind of scenario, though perhaps that's just my imagination.

[IMOGEAN]

Evoca either accentuates or destroys a piece of literature..Bravo young man, you have written something lovely and made it even more so with your voice.

Norma

[Bill Suter]

Stanzaic: there's order amongst the revival
of fallen gypsy castles, tidal-blown under
the restraints of etiquette, familiarity

and soul sacrifice; emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over.


And this is
just how I want it.

Despite any complaints you may lodge at the fates/ musues for thier skill in entrapping you in this desire to share every thought intimately, remember, this is just how you wanted it. And several hundred people don't mind perusing the elegant train wreck of your life, so there's no room for regret. Just a steady flowing forward into the instability that gives life its flavor. Nicely done, space alien and jelly bean addict.

Bill

[R. MonaLeza]

I love your voice, melodic, hypnotizing, feeding your words into my mind. Absolutely beautiful.

and soul sacrifice; emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over.

These lines will stay with me a long time. Kudos!

[Crystil Jewus]

Really good! :)

you don't sound like an alien... GASP VOICE CHANGER!

[Stephen Van Hyden]

The analogy between man and earth, the growth and violence that befall both, was dramatized in a beautiful context, an impeccable form, and a rather impressive narration. Fantastic ending, too.

[Mike P.]

Bravo man. Life is what we make it. I'm a fan of NIN but not so much of constant self loathing. Great piece.


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[Maria G.]

I'm seeing what you mean now, this is powerful stuff and hearing you read it made it all the more amazing.. Had to laugh at that comment to the guest too..lol
Another fav..

[Laura A. Shodire]

I love your godamned style.

[JlB]

Yeah I'd have to say I'm an admirerer of this one too, I havn't yet tried evoca, I know people love hearing my poems, but I don't know .. i'd rather writer,

but this is incredible, great job
JlB