Timeless

Evolution Of Happenings.

"If I Could Stand There Again. 

 On The Edge Of Eternity.

 With You My Queen.

 Of Happiness. 

 You Said Something So Precious.

 To Me It Has Me Driven.

 Into Chaos Within.

 Breaking Temptation.

 I Will Always Remember Those Words.

 I Have Become Forgetful.

 You Will Be Forever. 

 In Shadows.

  

 But You Still Hold My Lost Soul.

 Within Your Hourglass.

 Falling I Fall Forever.

 Without You.

  

 For It Was You Who Pushed Me. 

 Off The Ledge Of Paradise.

 But In My Timeless Heart.

 You're My Light.

 Now I Believe In An Evolution.

 That We Are Together.

 And Your Smile In Time. 

 I Will Remember."

Reviews

[Nautili]

The periods were different for me , but I liked this a lot, the wistfulness, the fond remembrance, the unabashed affection for this woman who stole your heart and left. Nice!

[Layla J Omorose]

I loved this. The way memory or time passes and fades yet are there anyway so that we remember them. Love is such a funny and interesting thing. I like how you had periods at the end of each line. Though I don't know if that was intentional or by accident but it gives a different flow to the poem. To me it made the poem pass by slower, having to pause at each period. Like in the poem it gave me time to reflect and remember the lines before the line i just read. It also adds a calmness to the poem where as without the periods it would seem more urgent and rushed. Good job.

[Poetic Beauty]

Stunning tale of love and remembering someone you loves beyond the depth of time and the universe

[Sleeping Maiden]

wow... this is romantic in such a dark way!!! ha ha, i love it so much!! =)
Beautiful, touching to my heart...

[rivers]

When the soul is deeply touched it is forever marked with memories.Your poem is nicely written and I really enjoy the tone the opening stanza sets...

[The White Wolf]

Darkly romantic! "Into chaos within, breaking temptation"...what a fitting description. We are all but lost souls until found. Well done, friend.