One Final Time

How It Ends.

                (Just)

Go outside and cherish the night 

 Look up at the stars above.

 

            (Pick One)

 Pull it from the darkness and write 

  After dusting it off put your name. 

 

              (In It)

 Remember this precious moment 

  Look close and you will see your tears. 

           (And Shine)

 Now place it back and give hope

  That someone remembers you. 

            (Forever)

 For this one final time I know now

  That I have a beautiful star to look at.

 

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Wow. This is one of the most imaginative pieces I've read in a while.... Metaphor/images just gorgeous. And I love the night and its tenderness! :-) First line has so much impact...Also, love the tear bit. Conclusion beautiful as well and image 'spot on' though it's powerful without it. An instant favorite. Read it and came on just so I could congratulate you on this one.

[rivers]

Nicely done...Dark to light with hope. Pleasant and an easy flow with a great emotional message.

[Clever Forever]

This is beautifully written. I love the way its structured.

[Penlady]

You've created a lovely, lovely vision!

[EmpressPoetess]

great poem with great sentiments!

[Aria]

interesting, short and leaves you with a cryptic message to some and a crystal clear message to others. the last line is sweet and leaves the reader with a wave of hope. good job.

[?]

Nicely done...great structure and message...receive HOPE and give HOPE
Well written..

[The White Wolf]

Oooh, I like this a lot. I don't have much to say. I just dig it. Nice work.

[Roe]

Wow I love this poem! great flow