One Final Time

How It Ends.

                (Just)

Go outside and cherish the night 

 Look up at the stars above.

 

            (Pick One)

 Pull it from the darkness and write 

  After dusting it off put your name. 

 

              (In It)

 Remember this precious moment 

  Look close and you will see your tears. 

           (And Shine)

 Now place it back and give hope

  That someone remembers you. 

            (Forever)

 For this one final time I know now

  That I have a beautiful star to look at.

 

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Wow. This is one of the most imaginative pieces I've read in a while.... Metaphor/images just gorgeous. And I love the night and its tenderness! :-) First line has so much impact...Also, love the tear bit. Conclusion beautiful as well and image 'spot on' though it's powerful without it. An instant favorite. Read it and came on just so I could congratulate you on this one.

[Clairabel]

This is beautiful, the words evoke such strong emotions of love and eternal feelings for someone so very special. It flows very naturally and doesn't feel forced as you read it aloud. Wonderful piece.

[Blindfolded]

A wonderful poem. We all hope to have someone we love see us in the stars, to always know how to find us and shine.

[TKBickel]

Beautiful to the eye as it is to the mind. Your format show me the message within a message.
I love the stars and you capture why I do, their beauty and the verge of immortality.
It leaves me with a sad sigh.

[FocusedAmnesia]

Immediately after I finished reading: awwwww.
I'm glad I'm alone, because it would be weird to coo at my laptop out loud.
You have an amazing way with words.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awwww. this is saddening to me.. but has this hope. I really like it. The pain here is expressed well and i could feel it. Beautifully written.
nice job.

[Dana Kathryn]

I LIKE THIS and i hope that some,even one will remember me as well..Beautiful!!! I Love all of your poems..

[Brooke Wake]

Nicely done. I really like the structure and you paint a very vivid picture!

[Cashmir's Lyrics]

beautiful

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love the format, it is a poem within a poem. Natural flow, laced in love.