Simple Cure

The Pill Of Darkness.

"Breath In Before This Illusion.

 That Cripples This Life Unreal.

 Why Is Your Heart Made Of Ice?

 I Corrode Away Your Soul As A Bridge So Old And Broken.

 I Grind Away Your Love In This New Machines Wheel.

 Is Your Life Worth The Price?

 Is There Any Care For You Out There?

 Is There Anyone Out There That Needs You?

 Then Forget Them - Just Put Me In Your Mouth.

 Think? Why Is It You Live In This Cold World?

 Ask?  Why Can't You Seem To Escape It All?

 Just For Once You Through Me In Your Weak Jaw.

 Is It True That Your Beauty Melts In The Rain?

 Why Do You Wash Me Down So I Become Vain?

 You Tried To Contain Me In The Same Blame.

 But On This Label - I Am Darkness In A Pill.

 You Knew If You Took Me.

 Then Your Life Would Go Downhill.

 Now Look At You - You're So Blind You Can't Even See.

 You Say Life Is Not Fare. 

 Then You Say This Is Your Nightmare.

 I Say Your Life Is So Rare.

 Down Here I Like You In Despair. 

 

 So Pick Me Up For I'm Your Endless Addiction Thats So Pure.

 Feel The Devil Within As I Become Your Allure.

 I Took The Pain Away So You Could Endure.

 But All This Time To You - I Was A Simple Cure."

                       

 

Reviews

[Jazique]

Nice. That that was just awesome(exactly how I said.) And I thought your about was just so alluring but, apparently so is poetry. I heard a little rhyme here and there and the king of descriptions I must as you can almost see it and feel it. It seems to be no errors present and just amazing over all in describing the pill the darkness and despair that took over person when all want and thought you were a simple cure. Well done and keep up the awesome work.

[watch_the_world]

nice ...... I'm kinda scared now

[Livana Lowell]

The description, title, and subject was interesting as you've granted the object of pain to express words, a sorrowed truth, a reflection of its possessor. The second stanza confused me a little, but overall, it was just interesting. The last stanza I absolutely loved, though. I also liked the third and fourth stanza as well where the pill seems to come to life.

[Victoria Thornton]

Interesting, I personally like it.

~!Be Your Own Hero!~

[FocusedAmnesia]

The first verse is so amazing, I read it three times before continuing on. I also love the last line of the second to last verse. Overall, the whole piece was just incredibly well written.

[emona]

i like that ^^

[Elizabeth]

Jesus... were you a fly on the wall with me this weekend? This speaks volumes to me... I have a few of those bottles.