Mirror Of Hope

Look Away From Within.

"Held By The Angels Above As Their Tears Shine For Me.

 Creeping Darkness Pulls Me Down Far As I Can See.

 Hunted By The Monsters Of My Past.

 Swinging Wildly To Force Them Into Ash.

 

 Burning Scars Ignite On My Heart.

 Buried In The Sands Of Time Just Lost Apart.

 It Hurts So Much Just As It Would Be As Such.

 Walking With Heaven's Lantern.

 Torn By Hell's Twisted Pattern.

 Shadows Turning Away As I Sway. 

 My Memories Are Silently Waiting.

 My Own Soul Is Fading. 

 I Fall But Keep Falling Alone.

 Just To Keep Holding On.

 I Keep Sliding Down.

 Just So Many Demons Around.

 My Light Is Running Out.

 As I Stand On Top Of The River Of Doubt.

 I Know I Just Keep Looking In Destiny's Scope.

 I See Myself Hanging On The Bottomless Slope.

 But I'm Running Out Of Rope.

 I Just Keep Crying In Front Of The Mirror Of Hope."

 

 

Reviews

[Cathy Wattam]

I like the idea of this, battling your inner demons and the eternal fight between light and dark. However, I don't think it flows as well as it could and in places the rhymes seem a little forced. The last two stanzas are moving in the right direction. you clearly think deeply and sometimes words that mean a great deal to you don't always mean the same to others but poetry is very personal and as long as you're happy with it, it matters not a jot what I think :-)

[Larry Dyson]

hmmm... you keep improving.... internal rhyme can make a verse seem out of place or read weirdly//try not to rhyme exept everyother line or not at all...your choice of words would be much more accepted and the overall smoothness of the piece would out...yes I like the questions Chris asked you as well..he is a good teacher..I know..he has taught me much...

[Gaiamethod]

That 'fall' is very well expressed. I know it well. Yes, I wonder if hope is all its cracked up to be!

[Chris]

Many views, many comments...
What were your thoughts as you scribed this... did it meet YOUR expectations, as you read it aloud - over and over - did the timing and flow mesh or stumble... and in the end does it SAY what you wanted to be heard?

Chris

[Sukriti Suki]

Excellent. Another great writ. This piece has a lot of thought provoking and deep lines.

[Gypsy]

Walking with heavens' lantern torn by hellsl twisted pattern...great use of words and a powerful read...really got lost in the poem. Lovely!

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

I do not see how you could ever want to stop writing. Your writing is so enticing. It draws you in and even when the end comes it leaves you longing for more. This is a truly grand piece. You have been given the gift of a true poet/storyteller from the days of ol....

[Myra Lochner]

Title and sentiments give the reader that inevitable spark, that ember instigating hope in a dark reality of strife and turmoil. Excellent expression of the very real inner war between darkness and Light. Well done, Poet.

[Joiedevivre]

That last line is so strong and so sad. Beautiful poem.