The Real Love

Love is what, that u care,
Not that u kept as spare,
Love is what, that gives u living,
It's not a matter of taking,
It's a matter of giving.
Love is what, that gives u respect,
Removes from u the tag of suspect,
Love is what, that gives u belief,
It's the way of giving relief,
Love is what,to share bond,
Not to keep every bit unfold,
Love is what, that makes u Passionate,
It's up to u how u decorate,
Love is what , that makes u humble,
Don't allow the faith on u to crumble,
Love is what, that have no limit,
Believe and hymn it,
So love ur love,
Becoz u love to be loved.

Reviews

[Jon Solis]

Hello Jasbir.

It is a complex, emotionally strong and deep prose/ poecy to transmit in a language that is perhaps not native to you. I urge you to read and re-read it for rythm, some word choice and grammar. It has great potential to transmit something true and honest.

I have no doubt that in your native language; this reaches with greater gravitas than in English.

Please accept this with good intention.

Jon.

...You will require no rating once you have read several times your own edit.

[Jasbir Kaur]

Ok sir, i will proceed as you said.
Thank you for guidance

[Gaurav]

A very well-written and felt. Love is the core of us and you feel it. All is good.

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much

[Cristina E. MCcombs]

I really enjoyed this . its a great write .

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much

[Victoria Berdnt]

This is a pretty good poem

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much

[Arvad Lazar]

good one. loved it very much :)

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you arvad lazar

[annalysiar]

I like the idea here your flow is amazing

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much

[Miss Sharon]

(Love is what, that gives u belief, It's the way of giving relief,) You have tackled such a complex subject with style, grace and charm. I "love" this! ~Sharon

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much
Sharon

[A.L.]

"It's not a matter of taking, it's a matter of giving." I love this because so many forget the latter and only want to take. I love the playful rhyme but the serious words behind this poem. Thank you so much for sharing this!

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much for your feedback.

[tanmay7551]

A very good definition of love and justification of what you take and give back in love.

Well written!

[Jasbir Kaur]

Thank you so much

[FArhaan FAzal]

human beings have a serious urge of being loved, that is why we soother the best in ourselves and put on the display in order to be loved- paulo coelho

nice words though (y)

[Jasbir Kaur]

Ya that's true. Thank you for the feedback