Parasite Fetish

Another Classic By J.R Schlievert I hope hahah

She creeps around without sound

She listens carefully

Not a sound, not a word

Shes home ward bound

 

The love of her life

Till death does she part

In this case she did

Motivated by strife

 

Don’t wake the children

For gods sake

Home ward bound

The note once written

 

Don’t bother cleaning up

It was a mess already

It will be handled

Note under the coffee cup

 

Shes a talented sneaker

Her feet approaching the door

Don’t wake the kids for gods sake

Laughing all the way to the bank

 

All the men she has met were selfish

Crude and rude

One thing in common

They all had a parasite fetish

Author's Note

Tell me what you honestly think, i want to get better :) learn from my mistakes

Reviews

[Voice11]

I really like the last two stanza's It tells me so much about the poem.

[CharlesMonroe]

Very good, I really like this. I can't really say anythign about it though, otherwise it would seem like I just stole SilentVerses review XP but this is amazing still (:

[SilentVerses]

Beautifully descriptive, sneaky and sensual in its delicate tone, joyous temptation between the lines of serious connotations, I like it.

[Annabray]

You never cease to amaze me love. =D

[Lunar Lightning]

Well, I can truly appreciate this in ways I can't even explain. This is well written and the point was made very clearly. I enjoyed the way it was written, and the inclusion of the children, naturally. It had a personal, distant bitterness that gave it a bit of a flair. Very well done and quite enjoyable.

Luna

[Diomaz]

Wow, I loved the use of irony in this!

Good work here, it was vey enjoyable.

[The Cute 1]

i like this

[Color of the Iris]

This was good, kind of hard to keep up with, and the rhyme scheme was jumpy, but it was a good! Good job!