Red Window

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Red Window

Red Window, Red Window open up your pane.

To let out the pain, of a girl once slain.

Red Window, Red Window bring in the light.

How do you bring light from this frostbitten night.

Red Window, Red Window who saw the father.

Of the girl once slaughtered, and blood gone cold.

Red Window, Red Window bring back the life.

Of a loving wife, and a caring daughter.

Red Window, Red Window who saw the man.

Knife in his hand, slowly going up the stairs.

Red Window, Red Window who saw the blood.

Body dragged through the mud, on flower buds.

Red Window, Red Window where did they go?

Red Window, Red Window

Reviews

[roseless_thorns]

i agree with revenant,it does kind of have a dark nursery rhyme feel to it.i like it :)

[Emily Quinn]

reminds me of a potential "bloody mary" type myth. Children recite this poem and mysterious things occure

[Jess.]

I liked this very much! Very lovely rhyme, and interesting story.

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

hmm...what can i say that hasn't already been said? nothing really. this is a fantastic piece. very well written. great imagery, nice rhyme scheme, good flow. nice tone as well. eerie. i like it. good job

[Abdul Aziz]

Great. It has an eerie atmosphere to it. The rhyme is perfect. And the poem flows very well. I don't think anything needs be changed here.
Great job!

[TTBoy28]

Quite mysterious with the pane holding the pain hostage. Frostbitten and brought back to life? I still like it.

[Taylor H.]

This was a great poem! I agree with stephin but overall this was a great write! Thank you for showing me!

[OkieWonKenokie]

Awesome! I love the red window, red window thing. It makes me think almost like mirror, mirror on the wall. Great write. Can't wait to read some more.

[Carolina Kel]

One thing I noticed that didn't flow that well "one a girl once slain" You might consider rewording that, but other than that, this is a very well written piece. I'm trying to picture a red window to go with this because that is not something you see every day.
A job well done.

[revenant21]

This was an awesome poem! To me it had a kind of dark nursery rhyme feel to it. It was indeed a fantastic poem, great work!


~Revenant