I'm Proud Of What I Did

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I’m proud of what I did

that’s what I said

that’s what I am

I’m proud

 

Crazy Man

Bitter Man

Digesting Man

They called me

 

But, in gods eyes

I did well

I wont go to hell

For what I did

 

Live is love

But love is inanimate

Then, what makes life?

Inanimate.

 

God loves me!

I screamed

As they hung the

Crazy Man

 

I watch in the audience

I watch myself drop

And burned

By righteous hands

 

But, little do they know

I will sill be there

Not in body

But by soul.

Reviews

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

Good imagery, powerful writing,
amazing job.

[Kazian]

very powerful, and very moving.
great job.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

another excellent write , i love this, good job. you are very talented

[Patricia]

That's right my dear... in the end, it was never between you and them, just you and God. Amen!

I like it. Love the whole "I am myself and that is enough," bit, and I like how you bring God into it at a few points. A few spelling errors, but not a ton. Awesome :)

[Aranee]

Just pointing out mistakes.

"Live is love"
Do you mean, "To live is to love" or "LIFE is love"

"Then, what makes life?
Inanimate."
This answer is a bit weird. Just as a grammar thing.

"But, little do they know
I will sill be there
Not in body
But by soul."

I will still be there.... but in soul.

You have to be careful with all your apostrophes, you keep missing them out :D

"I watch in the audience
I watch myself drop"

It is in the past tense, this whole poem. So it's "I watched in the audience, I watched myself drop"

"God loves me!"
This line should have speech marks since he was screaming it out?

Done with the grammar mistakes.
Now. The real review :D

I was wondering, is this poem like a snap poem?
(Snap poem is my term for a quick fast and easy write, leaving strewn mistakes in their wake)

So you need to really, really read and review it by yourself first before asking others.

By the way, I love the aura of mystery where you don't really know what he did.
But you could actually give a hint on why he was hanged.
Was he a witch? Like it was set in the olden times?

But this is powerful. Even though it's short. And clipped.
I'll be looking forward to your next reads.

[Secret Addiction]

I love it, it's amazing!!

[Wolfie]

This poem is powerful and touching. Very good I enjoyed. =^,,..,,^=

[Ama May Cooper]

Very repetivie... but good all the same missed some major flow .. but the meaning was clear and presice and worthy of beinh read.
Very deep and understandble

[Domo]

This is amazing, and such a deep poem.