The Storm

ENJOY

 

I see the gloomy, gaunt clouds approach with such authority.
The odor of dampness is riding on the dense winds between the plains of the concrete city
I pray,
Pray that storm is as elephantine as well as barbaric as is portrays to be

 

Lone rain drops splash on the solid, bone-dry cement
And more rain drops plunge
And plunge
And plunge

 

Until it was an uproar of mass proportions of rain droplets
And I was in the middle
Feeling the rain, imagining the worse
And a heinous little smile cracks over my face like hard asphalt on a hot summers day

 

People running to refuge
With newspapers and books over their wary heads
And high heels clopping on the wet sidewalk
Its raining

 

The wind, pushing the trees as the plantation try to exchange
The leaves holding on for dear life
My tan, button-down shirt flapped and rippled
Taking the shape of the harsh, bitter wind its self

 

The thunder, big and bold as gods voice
The thunder pounds on my weak heart, with every BOOM I recoil
But, the thunder wont hurt me
Sticks and stones mite brake my bones, but thunder will forever horrify me

 

One more thing is missing
The thing that makes the storm so jeopardous
And strikes fear into mortals
That sends a chill down spines

 

Lighting

 

It crackles as it strikes the earth
Making a scar on the homeland
It branches in the sky
And it makes the unseen in viewpoint

 

The hidden sun , passes through the ash-grays clouds
Bringing faith
Bringing a certain haven to the asinine city
Brings joy into the eyes of young children as they all darted out into the mud puddles

 

And I walk away
Annoyed
 

Author's Note

for fun :) say whatever

Reviews

[Daisy Morgy]

I love the part where you walk away annoyed this really makes the poem real in the eyes of the reader. The creativity and imagination was well thought and placed not to mention the storm you are describing but in different terms is perfect excellent write!

[Annabray]

Amazing. =D

[deeps]

Wow! This is quite the impressive write here.
I like this alot. This is amazing. I like your style.

[RiNNA<3]

awesome!(: nice words. crazy descriptive! i could literally image the scene down to the littlest details!

[nostal]

Holy crap, this is good.
The imagery is AMAZING!
But the ending is pitch=perfect!
It also made me laugh.
"And i walk away
Annoyed"

LITERARY GOLD!

[Sseoni]

This was an excellent poem! I was so excited about reading this and was seriously blown away by your poem! I can see that you're rising to the top with your poetry and becoming a better poet! Beautiful imagery, wonderful details and descriptions, and overall an amazing piece! Awesome poem! Loved the last part! It's my favorite! :D

[carlyraye 96]

..... what brilliant words being used, and i have to be blonde...? :D (thats supposed to be a blonde joke..lol)

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

say whatever... haha. i really liked this one cause free write poems are my favorite - to write and to read (though its been a while since i've really done either) the use of imagery is wonderful. I love this :

" The hidden sun , passes through the ash-grays clouds
Bringing faith
Bringing a certain haven to the asinine city
Brings joy into the eyes of young children as they all darted out into the mud puddles
And I walk away
Annoyed "

that made me laugh. Nice job! :)

[Neha]

eh,,,,another good one dude...

[QuietPoet]

This was really good. You did a nice job on the imagery. I liked how you used rain and thunder storms. Nice job. :)