Snow

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The guiltless hills touch the gray sky.

Snow crystals escalated ever so gently to soil.            

I stick out my tongue desiring to savor the sweet taste of elegance in a smaller, white shape. 

The crunch of snow with every step I take.

My eyes fixated out toward the most dazzling, most adoring, most caring girl in this winter Eden. 

I approach her softly.

Her long, silky brown hair wavering in the composed climate.  Her eyes are just as angelic as a crystal.

Her voice is as acquiet and as gifted as an archangel. 

She and I hugged and our hearts have the same mission.

Make one another happy.

Snow.

Author's Note

just tell me what you think and point out any errors

Reviews

[Lunar Lightning]

This is a very beautiful poem though I do think
that you could make the spacing more organized
and less whimsicle like it was in the poem. It seemed
to me like you did it by accident the spaces take no real
shape, you know? Also, it sounds like you have more to say
about the girl in the poem. It sounds as if it is someone
you really care for. So keep on writing and good job!

Luna

(Oh and just so the hint is taken, I made the review an example of what I meant by make the spacing more organized and maybe you did it on perpose so if so, sorry)

[Lizanne]

You wrote a wonderful poem. A double tribute to winter and love. Your descriptions are vivid enough to imaginatively stimulate both sound and sight. If you would break your longer lines into two, it would have a better visual feel and also the flow would be better. You have a typo at the end. You have hart instead of heart. Great job and keep on with the writing.