Nothing Compared 2U

After a break up what you thought was beautiful and great because a very dark shade of gray

Cold cold rain is falling

Turning to slush before hitting the ground

Slippery surface not yet snow 

But covering the sidewalk 

I’m trying not to fall 

Distant sounds filling my brain 

Like an echo does to a cave 

Solitude is an erection in my life 

Constant beating is what happens to my heart 

No wonder I ran away from you 

I realized back then something 

That today I tried to look over

In you there’s no future found 

Only an emotion to fill the senses 

Materialistic and senseless

A cold tundra of emotionless sounds

Navigating in a pale slate 

Hollow emotion 

Wrapped in a wonderful sculpture

Now lost I am found

Cause what I thought was clean and true

Is nothing compared to you

***Johnny A. Rojas***

October 25, 2010

Reviews

[just rose.]

The sustained metaphor here is really interesting. I think you do a good job with it, and wow, the hurt under this, and the ambivalence ... stuff that's hard to find words for, but you nailed it.