A Lunchroom Table

Blood flowing.
Vision tinted red.
Images flying through the mind.
Images of fists flying,

Teeth falling.
Sitting in silence,

Repressing the darkness.
Can't speak for it may never stop.
Seething as the fools surround.
Have to breathe or it will take control.

Author's Note

I'm new here so any reviews are welcome! :)

Reviews

[Rana]

The words reveal just enough, leaving space for imagination. "Images of fists flying,
Teeth falling." I like how you show us what's happening. You're skillful :)

[Owen Aldin]

Short and powerful. Getting a sense of bottled anger. The daily battles of the lunch room.....

[Sheila Crentsil]

This is amazing! You packed a lot of punch in just a few words...There is so much emotion in the imagery. Felt as if I was the speaker. The anger literally flowed through me. I've been in their shoes. Exceptional work!

[Vera]

Thank you so much for your kind review! It means a lot to me since I am new to the cafe. Thanks again!

[Lydia Shutter]

I feel a lot of emotional pain in your words. I think all of us, no matter what age, are still back in high school in a lot of ways. If we were rejected at the lunchroom table....ostracized and forced to sit alone...we never forget it. This effects self esteem. Very honest emotions expressed well here. Lydi**

[Vera]

Thank you. Even your reviews sound poetic. I get the feeling I will be looking to your poetry for inspiration for future poems! :)

[Nautili]

I thought I would return the favor and review one of yours. I can picture this scene in my mind. Very vivid. My daughter didn't eat at lunch because of bullying, it was a very trying year. Her self confidence plummeted. It was tough. I knew of one bully and stopped it through the school, but the other one she didn't tell me about until years later. The one at lunch was a female, the other one a male who called her "ugly" everyday. You would laugh if you saw how incredibly gorgeous she is today! Even then, she was far from ugly. Just mean people, out there, you know? Words hold power. Use them to uplift .

[Vera]

Thank you for your positive review. I am sorry about your daughter, I am glad you were able to resolve the problem. It is sad when things like that happen. I am glad she was able to move past that. :)