Sometimes

Sometimes

I know sometimes it feels as if you cannot go on,
Like your sitting and listening to the same old song.
Obstacles seem to overwhelm and leave you with doubt,
Know that I'm beside you and with me you will never be without.
Without hope, joy, peace and love,
Baby know we will come out above.
Above all the things people thought we should be,
My love for you will last for eternity.
Know that no matter how many miles of feet we are physically apart,
I always have a connection to your heart.
I can feel your pain, confusion and even your happiness,
Baby when your down your ego will I caress.
You are the best thing under God and Ny that came into my life,
And I hope that one day I can be your dream come true wife.
Im hoping the words from my heart will comfort you in some way, And that you,I and our family will be happy until that one sweet day..
 

Reviews

[CharlieO]

This is a lovely poem - very well written.
Your use of rhyme is interesting - it adds a wholeness to this piece - this is sometimes a difficult effect to achieve and you have done well with it. It has the effect of linking the two lines giving them meaning together.
I think you have dealt with the theme of love over a distance well - you have captured the feelings perfectly. There is a real feelings of hope despite everything coming through.
Congrats on this write.