I Strike Up A Deal

I Strike Up A Deal

A Poem by ..R.I.P..

I strike up a deal

The first out of many

I have a problem and won't admit it

But you see right through my false smile

You know something is up and yet you don't snoop

You waste your time flirting with other girls

While in the background of your party

I strike up a deal once more

© 2009 ..R.I.P..


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I didn't find it confusing either, instead really great. Funny how much I can relate...

Posted 15 Years Ago


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Zak
Hm...I love the purity. Especially the part where you say you've got a problem and won't admit it. I know how you would say "You see through my false smile." It's happened to me a lot. Good write. Also how you started and ended it with striking up a deal, even though maybe I'm not seeing what it means in the context of the poem.

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ZTM

Posted 15 Years Ago


I don't find this confusing in the slightest. I get what you're saying here. You want so bad for someone to care, and then a special someone keeps saying that they do, but then why don't they come and save you from your problems, other people, and, the most important of all: from yourself?

Posted 15 Years Ago


A little confusing in some areas. But I get what you said about wearing a fake smile and everything.
Good write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I don't quite get it...

Posted 15 Years Ago



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