Alberts 10 word poem

This poem has been specifically written for a contest "Alberts 10 word poem". All 10 words are in .

ALBERTS 10 WORD POEM

( All 10 words are in capitals)

 

As I sat staring out the WINDOW

Cup of earl grey TEA in hand

The LIGHT shone into my humble abode

Stained PATTERN on the old carpet

 

My BREATH was hardly visible

In the chilling morning air

I wanted to CREATE a TWIRL with my breath

But I couldn’t BARE the icy cold

 

My SENSES were numb

I held the warm cup closer

Trying to get some heat

Was it my imagination, or did I see the most beautiful BUTTERFLY fly past?

Reviews

[Joshua Smit]

love the way you contrast the deep coolness of this poem with the bright warmth of the ending

but, on a random side note, rooibos is so much better than earl gray:P
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rooibos

[LeeLee Ryder]

A cup of tea does relax and warm up the soul & yes, a butterfly imagined or not will pass by with such peaceful and free flowing poetry like yours...
Good job, JB.
LLR

[Valentine]

You used the ten words..Not all making sense like your usual writings but all right..Lathie

[Raspberry Rebel]

Loved the ending to this, I found myself hugging my cup closer as I read...most enjoyable :)

[FocusedAmnesia]

Flows beautifully!

[Mauricio Montoya]

love how it comes together.
great job!

[Yina]

Aw:) you did a great job using all the words:):)

[Shalini Dinesh]

Very different poem, most of the poem in that contest i read so far was mostly about butterfly or something usual... good try, good luck in the contest...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Clever, fun and quirky, made me smile! x

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seamless use of the words..thats how you do it :)