Uncertain holiday

Where are we going..it's so exciting!

Uncertain holiday

 

Butterflies in my stomach

Just booked the tickets

Oh how exciting

Off to Spain we go!

 

Viva Espana! Here we come

Bathing suits are out

Suntan cream packed

Don’t forget the passports.

 

We’re off to the airport

Taxi hurtling at a speed of knots

Passing the neighbours along the way

Waving “adios”, see you soon..

 

Fasten your seatbelts they announce

Gin and tonic in hand

Oh how we love our holidays

The sun, sea and sand.

 

Off we go high into the sky

Boats and people below like little ants

High above the clouds we fly

See you all soon..bye!

 

The last minute deal

Never knowing your destination

Oh the thrill of it all

The sheer excitement.

 

Landing now

Off we go, to where we don’t know

Onto the coach with others like us

All smiles and in trepidation.

 

A journey that seems to take forever

At last we’re here

Oh no..not this hotel

Looks like Fawlty Towers.

 

In we go like little sheep

Awaiting allocation of our room

In we go, we have to laugh

What a dump, yet again.

 

Never mind we have to say

Mustn’t grumble as Terry Wogan says

Only here for a fortnight

It’ll be alright..

 

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

very exciting

[sarah]

this is really good I would suggest trying to make it a little smoother a little more poetic. But it was really good!

[justice]

This is a story in poetic form. Yes, there is emotion, but I feel like a poem needs more than that. I just did not get the poetic vibe from this piece. You did a whole lot of telling, and no where near enough showing. I want to feel like I was on the trip with you, not that you are telling me what I missed. haha. You have a great basis for a poem, just go in and extract it! Thanks for sharing!

[M Garcia]

Great write. I can feel the excitement.

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! What happened? Didn't you still have fun? I'm sure you didn't stay in your hotel forever. Cute poem. Makes me want to go to Spain. I love to travel.

[Cassie316]

I pictured myself on this trip lol! It'll be all right unless this hotel room has bed bugs... or some other creepy bugs!!
One thing for inprovement... maybe its just me but sun tan cream sounds awkward we always call it sun tan lotion.... but it could just be my idaho dialect =p

[Tate Morgan]

We see it different when its work not pleasure happiness overlooks all

[Calypso]

Awww how cute.

[Dark Empress]

That's cute and sweet and funny to. I love it. Great write.