10 words

10 words

A Poem by JanieB
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Stipulated 10 words to be used in no more than 40 word poem.

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10 words

 

Looking out from my huge empire

The season changing

Rain is falling

Upon the dead, yellow moss

 

Snow Covering the frozen lake

Mist rolling over the valley beyond

Oh what a sight, now I feel such a fake

What empire?

© 2010 JanieB


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*********************************************************** challenges *****************************
11 words

rolling yellow moss
covering dead fake
empire rains
in lake season.

It was a challenge, but I tried to make at least a stanza on the words given. Couldn't and added [in] & one [s]. It really makes no sense, as sometimes poetry doesn't appear to right away. Even less sometimes in free form Prose. I enjoyed the trying and really enjoyed your well written poem. I think I'll try within the 40 the make a recognizable pretext... Thanks for making me smile.

******************************************************************************* today *************** ;)
Write On / Right On! Romon in Review. Peace

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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this is good! definitely a masterpiece given the fact that those 10 words don't really seemed too related to one another! brilliant!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

interesting!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Cool, bet that was fun wasn't it~!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Tough challenge, great work :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

that was a tough challenge you did well

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That looks like a fun exercise. I'm not sure I could put ten random words together into a poem this good =)
though I have to add that the second to last line almost doesn't make sense, but I don't really notice too much when I read through this =)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

*********************************************************** challenges *****************************
11 words

rolling yellow moss
covering dead fake
empire rains
in lake season.

It was a challenge, but I tried to make at least a stanza on the words given. Couldn't and added [in] & one [s]. It really makes no sense, as sometimes poetry doesn't appear to right away. Even less sometimes in free form Prose. I enjoyed the trying and really enjoyed your well written poem. I think I'll try within the 40 the make a recognizable pretext... Thanks for making me smile.

******************************************************************************* today *************** ;)
Write On / Right On! Romon in Review. Peace

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 words stipulated to be used in this poem of no more than 40 words total..
Empire, Moss, Dead, Yellow, Covering, Season, Rain, Fake, lake, Rolling.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 27, 2010
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JanieB
JanieB

Paphos, Europe, Cyprus



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I started writing in October '10. A real new bee to this world of writing. I currently live in Cyprus, where I have been since 2005. I am British, and have spent many years living abroad. Please j.. more..

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