Come let's hide...

Come let's hide...

A Poem by Anindita Janhabee
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Just my way to imaginations

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Come let's hide...
Across the ocean
Beyond the sea,
Beneath the infinite sky
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
Top of the mountain
Under the tree,
By the seashore
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
On the moon
Folding hand to knee,
Behind the sun
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
Towards the fields
Setting the hearts free,
Underneath the rainbow
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
Along the lake
With utmost glee,
Up the clouds
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
Above the hills
With three words to agree,
Beside the waterfall
Just you and me.

Come let's hide...
Around the valley
Blessed by the almighty,
Inside a sweet little hut
Just you and me.




© 2016 Anindita Janhabee


Author's Note

Anindita Janhabee
Deep into my imaginations...

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Deep and beautiful. Seems like reading a song of two...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks again...
glad you liked...
There is a tender, beautiful joy that sings through your words. For those who love this deeply, it is pure joy to find that escape to a sacred place to be alone as one. So wonderful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot sir for your support and encouragement. .
Written amazingly well. Nice one.
Regards,
Arun

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for your visit...
Hey...it's a sweet little poem by you...I enjoyed it while reading...and also shows that how love birds want to spent there time together;)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

well, nothing to worry coz I mostly talked abt u with my best frnd in WC...
silly girlllllll.. read more
horizon

7 Years Ago

Aree I am not worried yarr...
Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

haan ji... mujhe pata hai...
miss silly, sometimes I can also act silly ok...
Anindita! This poem is so innocent and lovely. I really like it. It had me smiling. I love the repetition. Keep writing, my friend. You have great talent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the kind words my dear...
You are a good writer. I'm nitpicking and throwing balls at walls here but if it were me I would probably play around with to either the first or last line in each stanza. Being that there are seven stanza's I would recommend having three different lines that you rotate. The first intro would be used 3 times and the second and third twice.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the review and suggestions sir...
I'm glad for your visit. I'd rather work o.. read more
I love all of the different ways you incorporated where to hide in nature with the person you love.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dear writer for the warm visit........ thank you...
All in all, I love the way you've crafted this message to suggest many of my favorite ways to go hide, which is in nature. I'm not crazy about how the first & last line of every stanza is repeated . . . a bit too much repetition for my liking . . . but this could be played with a little to create some variations so it doesn't all start sounding the same over & over. I really love the 3 central lines of every stanza, tho. Good creativity!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for sharing your views...Always appreciated...
Vivid images, great imagination, just such a beauitfully well writtten and heartwarming piece. If only we could escape and hide away into these wonderful places.

Mark.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much sir for your visit...means a lot to me...
WONDERFUL POEM WELL WRITTEN...KEEP IT UP

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your visit....
Aaishani

7 Years Ago

MY PLEASURE..

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Jeypore, Odisha, India



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