There is a tender, beautiful joy that sings through your words. For those who love this deeply, it is pure joy to find that escape to a sacred place to be alone as one. So wonderful!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thanks a lot sir for your support and encouragement. .
well, nothing to worry coz I mostly talked abt u with my best frnd in WC...
silly girlllllll.. read morewell, nothing to worry coz I mostly talked abt u with my best frnd in WC...
silly girllllllll....
7 Years Ago
Aree I am not worried yarr...
7 Years Ago
haan ji... mujhe pata hai...
miss silly, sometimes I can also act silly ok...
Anindita! This poem is so innocent and lovely. I really like it. It had me smiling. I love the repetition. Keep writing, my friend. You have great talent.
You are a good writer. I'm nitpicking and throwing balls at walls here but if it were me I would probably play around with to either the first or last line in each stanza. Being that there are seven stanza's I would recommend having three different lines that you rotate. The first intro would be used 3 times and the second and third twice.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for the review and suggestions sir...
I'm glad for your visit. I'd rather work o.. read moreThanks a lot for the review and suggestions sir...
I'm glad for your visit. I'd rather work on it sometime later when I am in full spirit to make it better with time....
Thanks again...
All in all, I love the way you've crafted this message to suggest many of my favorite ways to go hide, which is in nature. I'm not crazy about how the first & last line of every stanza is repeated . . . a bit too much repetition for my liking . . . but this could be played with a little to create some variations so it doesn't all start sounding the same over & over. I really love the 3 central lines of every stanza, tho. Good creativity!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for sharing your views...Always appreciated...
Vivid images, great imagination, just such a beauitfully well writtten and heartwarming piece. If only we could escape and hide away into these wonderful places.
Mark.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much sir for your visit...means a lot to me...
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