Apart and Depart

Being apart,
I met you
Being apart,
You admired me
Together we created a strong bond called 'love'...
Being apart,
You touched my heart
Being apart,
I read your eyes
Not in my wildest dreams was love possible to me...
Being apart,
You kissed me
Being apart,
I missed you
Both of us promising to be together forever and a little more than forever...
Being apart,
You reside in my heart
Being apart,
I was your soulmate
As we dreamt of our house of love far away...


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During departure,
You took away my heart
During departure,
You gifted me with tears
Breaking all the promises made before days...
While departure,
I called you back
While departure,
You didn't even turn to me
Leaving me all alone once again...
While departure,
I kept sobbing
While departure,
You began to like her
Making me worse than I was ever...

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Living a lifeless life without you
You won't come back, it's true...
How to smile and blush without you,
How to lead a lonely path without you...
How to take peaceful breath without you,
How to live a life without you.......

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I like how you expressed it all in a flowing way of emotions and proper words of contrast. Excellent...:)................

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you sir... for your warm words....
always appreciated...

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly. ....:::)))))

[The dark story]

This is really touching and emotional. It's weird to witness the sudden transformation of feelings and people- time is a great healer but a demon too. What's fatally wounded is the feelings and emotions sealed with constancy. The chariot of time crushes them mercilessly...because the only thing constant is change itself. I loved the emotions flowing like a cascade through the words, they were heart-warming in the beginning but emotional when nearing the end.
Thanks for sharing such a simple and beautiful piece.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you so much for your wonderful words and precious time.....
much appreciated....

[The dark story]

it's a pleasure. :)

[Egonarc]

I didn't enjoy the repeating so much. Not fun of songs or writers who do this.
But I approve of how you manage to sound smooth and I could... I WANTED to keep going~! The emotion seems so raw and you can really tell how this experience impacted you.
it is breathtaking and amazing thanks for sharing this piece with the reader!

[Anindita Janhabee]

I appreciate your comments... always welcome... And thanks for the read...

[Farha Nayamee]

Its the fact...loved ur poem for its reality...we apart depart we exit enter life is a journal in between the two words...

[Unknown Poet]

I have no words to review these 3 departments of actions n deep feelings... I undergone all of these feelings and still trying to overcome... I can advice one thing for you .. if he just cheated U in that case don't spoil urself in his remembrance.. U will b having a strong reason to getover he cheated U for somebody else. Perhaps if your both faiths seperated U and he too strongly feel U ... i strongly appreciate you..

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot for your honest and humble review....

[Unknown Poet]

Most welcome.... Sorry for misspelled words in this review..

[Anindita Janhabee]

Nothing to worry ........
it's always a pleasure reading ur reviews....

[Unknown Poet]

Thank you :)

[tanmay7551]

Being apart you wrote so well,
Had to review and my writings fell.

Very good thoughts about soul mates and though so far they are so near.

[mou]

it is very sad..you have written it in a beautiful way that seems I am riding a journey of a chapter of life..but being a friend , can wish for you that you should have all the justice and a right one in your life..

[Manisha]

this is really good !!!!! such an interesting thought !!!!, very well constructed...
thanks for sharing....

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you my dear frnd!!!😃

[Bala Gorthi]

The phase of love, separation and the agony is beautifully expressed in this write Anindita!
Presentation in sections and repeatition of the phrases made your write impactful..
Though in the second section,the words while departure looked a bit odd combination to me because while is not a preposition so the combination was not going down well for me. I think during departure is okay or at departure also can make a better sense..this is just an opinion.
Nevertheless, your write write is touching..
Thanks for sharing..

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot for your suggestion dear writer...
Your words are always encouraging.......
read moreThanks a lot for your suggestion dear writer...
Your words are always encouraging.......
thanks a lot....
Actually this happens when we write from heart, we don't give stress on words...
Well, I'll definitely keep in mind...

[Ashish]

Being apart,
It was not easy
Being apart,
You must be busy
Being apart,
Still I wish lots of happiness for you
Being apart,
I am incomplete without you..

Nice work :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot for reading...
btw, you wrote this little sweet poem for her Na...

[Ashish]

Of course ... May be it is only her ...because of whom I am writing

[Anindita Janhabee]

so nice.... Keep writing....
true love never dies... have hope ... have faith.....

[Ashish]

Yeah ..waiting for twist in the movie ..let's see when it comes