Sleepless nights

Out of sleep...

I remember the day

It was raining heavily

And you were all set

To leave the town…

I remember the hour

It was like thorns piercing

At the centre of my heart

As you walked away…

I remember the minute

I felt like I was falling

Into uncountable pieces

For you didn’t even think of me…

I remember the second

When tears shed

From my dark brown eyes

Because you left me alone…

I remember each moment

That passed as I missed you

From the core of my heart

Cause my soul belonged to you…

I remember each night

I kept thinking of you

Being sleepless

And still loving you…

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Something penned down unknowingly...
please rate or review....

Reviews

[D]

Oh I don't have words to say how much I relate... Losing that very special someone, and loving him/her even in the present....
Then I've figured, in my case ...It's their memory we love. The person he/she was before leaving.
Beautiful piece.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Yes... you are right...that someone who is very special and forever will be. Obviously I am too much young to have such ideas but God gave me those a bit earlier I guess...hehehehe.... still I am glad for whatever I have got. I may not have won but as I have experienced, my purpose have been served...

[D]

Just continue sharing your work. There's a bright future ahead of talented souls like yourself (:

[hi]

now that is deep,
i love it and it sounds amazing,
rate it you say? ummm how about 8 out of ten

but i love the images you show

[Anindita Janhabee]

oh my dear, thank u so much!!! I've learnt that the poems which we write out of pain is better than the think-and-write ones... thanks again for the reviews dear...

[Anindita Janhabee]

I'd like to know more about you, also I will be reading your works soon and I will try my best helping you with your writings okay.... : )

[An owl on the moon]

So beautifully painful, each moment, these feelings and impressions are flooded with love and longing for what was, before that sorrowful day. Makes me ache.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot for visiting... I am glad that you could feel the emotions within..

[Gray]

I've rarely known a happy moment when hearing someone close was going away. Your emotional response in a poem is moving and understandable. That type of bond is hard to break.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks dear for the warm review nd visit. Yes, it's a kind of bind hard to break... glad that you understood the emotions present in here.... I hope u noticed the timings mentioned (day, hour, minute, second, moment and finally night)...
thanks friend... : )

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks dear for the warm review nd visit. Yes, it's a kind of bind hard to break... glad that you understood the emotions present in here.... I hope u noticed the timings mentioned (day, hour, minute, second, moment and finally night)...
thanks friend... : )

[Gray]

As they started a new stanza (or seemed to) yes I did. Your welcome.

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Wow, so much emotion in here. I stumbled upon this poem and started reading and couldn't stop. And then the end left me wanting more. It was very beautiful and truly captivating. Your talent shines through every line.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you so much for stopping by, stumbling in your words... hahahaha...
Your reviews support me a lot and inspire me to write more...

[Ananya]

It's such a hearfelt write. They way describe day, hour, minute...just beautiful and so sad.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Anu, thanks for enjoying the poem....
I am glad for your support... : )

[Ananya]

💓💓💓💓💓

[Sami Khalil]

"my soul belonged to you…

I remember each night

I kept thinking of you

Being sleepless"

Emotional and piercing to the hearts. Effective as you affect...:)....................

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot sir, for your sweet encouragement through words...

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....:)))))

[Tessa Melendez]

The pain is so very clear in this piece. And so relatable. It's amazing when one realizes how a person can affect you so and never notice.

[Anindita Janhabee]

yes... the person is unable to notice... still unable... it pierced me like a knife into the heart... I'd not be in a position to write if my best friend here would not have supported me... still I am broken, living without a heart, cause it is stolen by the same person who is unable to notice anything now....

[-]

I felt your pain and the pain that comes when someone you love leaves your life. It is crazy how some one can affect you this way and you captured it wonderfully in this writing. N.

Love the sleepless night part.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks a lot for visiting my page...
The best part about pain is that it produces excellent poetry...
Thanks again for the wonderful review...

[Papaya]

Your use of repetition really emphasizes the pain you felt. Very well done.

[Anindita Janhabee]

thank you, I am glad that you did like...