Like always a comment review is welcome.
I got the inspiration from a writer on this site and from a song that was written long ago (not by me).
I started lately writing songs that are all questions, i think it really makes you think.
Tell me what you think about my new way of writing.
Thank you!
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Your poem is a well reasoned examination of human nature and it's weaknesses, which, is usually governed by greed
Unfortunately, good and evil are just perceptions, depending on whether you are gaining or losing from other peoples actions. One person's patriotism is another person's enemy.
When we all have a common goal ,evil will become redundant.... but I fear that will never be.
Your poem effectively tries to qualify this, and I applaud your thin but in the end the only "official" answers come from self annointed experts.
But keep examining and writing in this way, Firemay . It's healthy to question any form of dogma.
This would make a good song, set to a piano and maybe a string instrument? Key of D minor and you're in business haha.
I liked it, it's really thought provoking. Philosophers to psychologists keep trying to answer the question, but I don't think they ever will.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Haha, i didn't mean for it to become a song but that sounds really nice.
thank you!! And i .. read moreHaha, i didn't mean for it to become a song but that sounds really nice.
thank you!! And i know that these questions are really hard to answer.
Good questions. There is an evil in all of us and that has to be reigned. We have a good person in all of us as well and that needs to be promoted.
Sometimes circumstances play a big role in what type of person we are going to be
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I agree. Circumstances to play a big role and decide what we use more, the good or the evil but it i.. read moreI agree. Circumstances to play a big role and decide what we use more, the good or the evil but it is up to the person himself too.
I like your poem.I believe that evil is in the minds of human beings only.Animas kill only for their survival. Nice poem
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
That is true, but there can be a dog that is mean and one that is not, it doesn't just depend on the.. read moreThat is true, but there can be a dog that is mean and one that is not, it doesn't just depend on their survival skills.
One of THE biggest questions of human existence... and you have voiced it well. Is evil a part of nature, as asked in the first stanza? Or is it a product of human desire for action, love, pleasure, etc.? The final stanza is particularly intriguing to me. It makes me think of all the people who have done terrible things throughout their lives, and the fact that there are people who love them despite these things. What kind of things go through their minds when they see what those they love have done? How powerful is forgiveness? I love the way you have addressed so many facets of this highly complex issue through the questions in this piece. Great work!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
well i figured it is too complex to answer, and i don't know the answers either so i ask the readers.. read morewell i figured it is too complex to answer, and i don't know the answers either so i ask the readers these questions. You cannot know how and why we are able to love some one who has turned so evil, so we cannopt really answer these questions. We can only think about it.
Thank you!
I think your new style of writing is quite encouraging, what I'm noticing is that you are using more thought provoking concepts in your writings... I like the way you have asked some questions to the reader and make him think about them in a logical way... Evil and good both are two sides of a coin, both fulfill each other... Your last four stanza has been outstanding... Evil comes from pain, struggle, and heartbreaks of a heart, evil is not evil by itself but circumstances make it...
I liked the last two things alot. Honestly from a third person's point of view this question makes so much sense. How can one love anything that courts disaster. Why are people Okay with being masochists? And honestly, its not an accusation hidden under question. It is sheer curiosity. What can it be that drives one to something evil and dangerous?
I loved the way you put your thoughts in this one. Great going. keep writing!
i didn't write this poem out of judgement and accusation, like you said, it's pure curiosity. .. read morei didn't write this poem out of judgement and accusation, like you said, it's pure curiosity.
I wrote this from the third person's point of view because of the mere fact that i didn't come to judge.
Thank you! Don't worry, I will!! ;)
8 Years Ago
That's exactly why i mentioned its not accusation hidden under question! I got your point :)
Without evil, do you think the circle will ever be complete?
Imagine, if there was no evil, will good be any good?
I thought of this many years back, evil is the necessity and good are what we are doing to rectify the situations. Because, evil is just part of moral and these morals are different in every human or any lives.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I never said evil isn't important to the balance of the universe, and of course, without it good won.. read moreI never said evil isn't important to the balance of the universe, and of course, without it good won't be good, it'll just be.
Hey, I'm 22 years old.
My writing is everything for me, if it's in my mind, it's on a page.
My hobbies are dancing, writing, reading, painting and photography.
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