Transparent...

Transparent...

I see through your lies
and peer into those evil eyes
I'm sure your surprised that I'm not
falling for your demise,

You are as transparent as they come
I can't believe you tried playing me for dumb
you piece of scum, I laugh at people like you
peek a boo "I see you" and there is nothing that
is true about you,

Your fake is crystal clear no matter how you try
to appear, I see you for who you really are and your
not as smart as you think you are,

So come out of the closet and face the music
the lies are over done you abused them,
they are even sick of playing pretend don't you
want this nonsense to end,

I will never respect you but that shouldn't matter
I just pray one day you will respect yourself
you my friend need some professional help,

Transparent to everyone that knows you
the only one your fooling is yourself
and I know that's got to hurt no matter what
you say, come out of the closet and repent today...

Author's Note

God is good!!!

Reviews

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Strongly written.....

Your words really display the intense level of betrayal that this person has caused you. It is written with a rhythmic savageness, aimed directly at the heart and fakery of the person the poet is writing about. When one is betrayed, for whatever reason, the first emotion is obviously anger. In time that anger mellows to become strength. The strength to overcome. The strength to soothe the soul.

My introduction to your writing, and it is very intense and raw and edgy. Nice work.

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[WriterGirl101]

I read your poem and I loved it. I know many people like this, so I can relate. :)

I would like to point out just a small thing if you don't mind..

(I'm sure your surprised) should be "You're"
(and and your not as smart as you think you are) has the same thing. I make the same mistake all the time though lol, just wanted to help out a bit. Overall I really loved it, You are a great writer and I look forward to reading a bit more.. :)

[Leo]

Powerful stuff .. read nicely and melodically from start to finish .. felt like a short movie about a powerful man with piercing eyes either stalking a once loved one, trying to raise her or eradicate her :).. extremely creative!

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Terrence Chang]

Great write James. It was a good read

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[A. H. Pinley]

A different format than what you usually use.

[Jamestown]

Yep trying new things:) Thanks again for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Fran Marie]

They go through life with program of lies thinking they're fooling everyone
When in reality it they who fool themselves..your verse flows so smoothly..

nice work

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Kshitij Gupta]

I've come across such people and I can totally relate with this poem. Beautifully written.
"..the lies are over done you abused them,
they are even sick of playing pretend don't you
want this nonsense to end,"
This honestly brought a smile to my face haha brilliantly written.
Kudos
PS: Forgive my lack of knowledge if I'm wrong, but isn't it supposed to be "peer" instead of "pier" in the 2nd line?

[Jamestown]

Yes it is:) Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Mara]

Nice message here, unfortunately these pretenders they lie so much they even start to believe there own lies, i hope they can find away to better themselves or leave us alone

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed! I

[SmittyJas]

The secrets out I'm scum I'm a bum shout it out kick you out of heaven when time comes God's Grace was not enough for me I devil food Cake.

[Chirag Kumar]

Your poem relates to everyone who has faced betrayal in their lives. Nice message and a smooth flow of words. Loved it :)

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!