CLOUD 9...

CLOUD 9...

I am definitely love struck,
I'm not even trying to pass the buck,

When I saw her love coming my way,
I tried to duck but she hit her target,
and now I'm stuck,

My head is no doubt in the clouds,
and I would be lying if I said I wasn't proud,
I feel completely blessed when she's around,
my girl is the epitome of being down,

So as we chill on cloud 9 and spend some,
quality time, kissing & hugging and hitting,
rewind, we indulge in our frenzy for one another,
growing closer playing the game of discover,

My heart is in a state of heavenly bliss,
the more & more we chill and kiss,

I want this trance to last forever,
I want her to be with me in all of my endeavors,
when we are together my life just feels better,
this is a tie I must be careful not to severe,

If it feels this good being with her and having my,
head stuck in the clouds, please God let me stay
on cloud 9, I don't ever want to come down...

Author's Note

GOD IS GOOD!!!
Just having fun, hope you enjoy:)

Reviews

[alf]

Hi James. Who would want to land back on earth after all that heavenly bliss!!!! Wow, that was rollicking good times!!! Loved this, alf

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and your kind review, b-blessed!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Cloud 9--the poor man's resort area.
Nothing like young love, Jamestown; a great blessing.
Your poem articulately describes the benefits and skillfully portrays the emotions connected with this glorious endeavor.
Thanks, good poet, for bringing back some precious memories!

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and your kind review, b-blessed!

[mournful bear]

Wow great!! A lot of emotion!! I feel it!! Stay in the cloud as long as possible and keep her up there as well!!!!!!!

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

This is cool James and love the word choice here!

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[andrew mitchell]

This poem has such a nice flow it just wraps around the reader's thoughts and embraces you as you enjoy the journey.

[Jamestown]

That's cool, thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[wordman]

cloud 9 and love potion number 9 sounds like you got a double shot

[Jamestown]

All in due time:) Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[wordman]

good luck my friend

[steven]

one of the best pieces of poetry I've read!

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Gio S.P.]

The simplicity in your poetry is what captured my immediate attention and that is not a bad thing, my friend! Many of the times poets and writers alike try to dig into complex words and rhyming but beauty can be so simple, so free-flowing, so alluring and that is what makes your poetry stand out. Well done!

[Jamestown]

Wow, again I agree with you completely, thanks for checking it out and your
kind review, b-blessed!