Hidden Hearts...

Heart Broken...

Hidden Hearts...

When our hearts have been broken,
lied to, ripped out, stomped on and
have been taken advantage of,

Our natural defense is to tuck our hearts in and hide
them from the world, While we hide our hearts
from the world, the chance of rebuilding them
with the glory of love passes by day in and day out,
like a fair breeze on a warm spring day,

As time comes and goes as fast as lighting
in a storm, our hearts begin to wilt like a rose,
without sunlight, no light which leads to no hope,
which leads to no life,

By hiding our hearts, we are essentially killing
them with a slow painful, unloved death,
Because we are terrified to let them see the light of
day, knowing that pain our hearts suffered could happen again,

Hiding our hearts is not the answer, to a happy
healthy heart, and the safety we think we're providing
is not safe at all, our hearts need to love and be loved,
and hiding away in some dark spot, certainly isn't
allowing our hearts the joy and love they need and desire,

We have to once again become vulnerable,
and take a chance at love, we can't keep
our hearts hidden forever...

Reviews

[Geca]

I love the progression of this piece! It builds up like slow crescendo, with the main message crashing over the reader like a wave. Lulled into the false belief that guarding your heart is a must, it is shattered once the metaphor takes a turn for the worse and points out that what you may think is protecting you can be the very cause of your harm. It's a wonderful, emotion-wracked piece that can also serve as a social commentary, since people are torn between thinking that hearts should either be bared out to the world, or shut off completely. You've walked the delicate tightrope of the in between and concluded that not everything is black and white. Monotonous colors aside, this poem has beautiful imagery though! Great work!

[Jamestown]

I am so completely impressed by your in depth and fluent reviews, if I could hire
you I would, lol:) this makes extremely interested or should I say curious about
your work, if you are as in depth and fine tuned as a writer as are a reviewer.,
then wow!Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Geca]

Hahaha, thank you! For both the sentiment, and for reviewing my work as well!

[Riv]

Hidden hearts are hard to get past. Some of us spend our entire lives with them hidden because others constantly hurt us simply because they also been hurt. As it goes, hatred will breed more hatred and it is certainly true. But when we can open our hearts out to other even ourselves, that is a beautiful miracle to hold dear.

[Jamestown]

I understand completely, I have had my heart shredded to pieces, but
me must seek and give love, love is King and conquers all,thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh my god!!!
this is so beautiful sir........
so so true and relateable.....
absolutely amazing......
i loved it!!!!!
:)

[Jamestown]

Thank you very much, I too feel this way about your work:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

it was a pleasure Sir........thank you Sir for your kindness......!!! :) :)

[Nini]

The first stanza is so easy to relate to. We have all had our hearts broke, and reading your description in that stanza, made me feel those emotions again. I like how you describe loves passing as a breeze in the second stanza. A lot of emotion in the third stanza. And the fifth and last stanza is magnificent. Words/advice we all need to remember in those times of brokeness.
A truly beautifully written piece.

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and your kind review, b-blessed!

[Beccy]

We can hide from others, but not from the creator. Solace can be found in the most sorrowful of times and that solace always heals.


Beccy.

[Jamestown]

Amen! I agree, thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[Healing Star]

Jamestown, you really spoke to me in this piece. This happened to me. when I was young, my heart got stepped on, and I did exactly what this talks about. I wish I would have been able to read this many years ago, maybe I would have seen what I was doing. I did it without really seeing what i was doing, I kept myself small, always hiding behind something just like you said trying to protect it from it happening again. Great writing, great message, I think it will help people like me to see what they are doing, I realized it not too long ago, it took me a long time to see it and accept that was what I did, I think I am still trying to accept it completely. thanks great work.

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out, I appreciate your kind review and I too had a 15 year
marriage collapse and I am reminding myself. If I can help even 1get through a
tough time, then praise the Lord! All the glory belongs to Christ anyways:)

[Healing Star]

amen, aho, light and love to your heart - may we all find our way to opening our hearts.

[Mai L Nissen]

I love the message - this is something we all know we shouldn't do, yet we still do it :)

Some of the poem was perhaps a bit explanatory for my liking... However, that is a personal reference :)

Though, this description I found beautiful with a nice flow and imagery:
"As time comes and goes as fast as lighting
in a storm, our hearts begin to wilt like a rose,
without sunlight, no light which leads to no hope, "

Your conclusion good too:
"We have to once again become vulnerable,
and take a chance at love, we can't keep
our hearts hidden forever... "
- sounds as if you are imploring yourself and others to open up - live with an unencumbered heart!

Overall the poem is good. However, the quotes I have mentioned here, I think are great!
Thank you for sharing, JT :)

[Mai L Nissen]

My review may be coloured by the fact that I just read 'Love's Flight...' before reading this... haha :)
That one I REALLY enjoyed!!

[Jamestown]

As you know as a talented writer, I always try to be better then my last, but
that is easier said than done, lol:) can't win them all my mom used to tell me!
Thanks again and b-blessed!

[Mai L Nissen]

True, it is definitely easier said than done! Your mom sounds wise :) Still think it is a good poem, just think the other was really, really good! :D

[AprilRN1210]

This is one of those times, those lessons in life, that is definitely easier said than done.. We may know it is wrong, but it is a gut, instinctual response.. not like as soon as someone kicks you in the "feel goods" you stand up, expose yourself, and say "here ya go, do that again.."... ya know what I mean?.. Fear is a very powerful emotion.. especially coupled with intense pain.. I love the heartfelt, positive, motivational message of this piece.. overall, nice job..

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out, so ironic you reviewed this, my good friend Sin Sincerity
David) just joined the cafe were sitting here talking about the talent @ the cafe and
I mentioned you as one of the elite, thanks again for your review and b-blessed!
please check his work, he is interested to see what you think:)

[AprilRN1210]

oh wow.. "elite?".. I am tickled.. honored.. humbled.. that you think so... you are very kind.. there are soooo many talented writers on this site, it is awesome to be a part of this community.. I will definitely check him out!.. thank you.. and you are more than welcome.. it was my pleasure..

[sinNsincerity]

Thanks a ton:)

[sereenaoutloud]

We have to be open to let love in as hard as that maybe! Great piece.

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Toucé! "Hiding your heart isn't the answer to a healthy heart."

[Jamestown]

Thanks for checking it out and b-blessed!