James Hamilton & The Mirror

James Smith Hamilton series part one. Read part two "James Hamilton & Angels"

James Hamilton´s looking in the mirror,
the old, dirty mirror.

James Hamilton is young but his minds heavy,
Its an old man´s mind.

James Hamilton sometimes feels some headache,
because sometimes it gets to heavy for a young man that old man´s mind.

James Hamilton then needs something to get it light again,
that heavy mind.

James Hamilton will be found then in front of the old, dirty mirror,
with a bottle of fire water in his cold, white hands.

James Hamilton drinks the poison, let it run down his throat, it warms him,
warms his heart, which can´t beat under the weight of his old man´s mind.

James Hamilton´s looking in the mirror,
the old, dirty mirror.

Author's Note

It´s my first writing so I would love to get some feedback.

Reviews

[Kitt]

I liked how you ended and begun the peom the same way. I don't know who James Hamilton is, but I feel like you described him well.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Good poem :)

[KAOlmsted]

Ah that fire water...always does the trick ;-) I think it's a pretty good start. Good luck with your novel.

[James Hamilton]

Tank you very much!!! :)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure.