Ever Really There

as I stood 
at the base of the cliff,
I looked skyward
at the sheer rock.
And I as I stared, 
with the sun in my eyes,
I wondered aloud
at what I was doing in this spot.
And while I was wondering
a dog walked by,
he sniffed the ground at my feet
and paid me no mind.
And after the dog had wandered off
a bird of unknown origin 
landed on a limb
in a tree growing next to me.
I saw the bird and heard his song,
but he never saw me there.
And the bird flew off 
to a land unknown
and left me by myself
and all alone.
And then I saw a path
and climbed to the top;
when I was there 
I looked down 
at the spot where I had stood,
and saw no sign 
that I was ever there.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a brilliant soliloquy & I can almost see & feel someone doing & thinking it all the way along. Deceptively simple, this really makes a person ponder some deep stuff. I normally enjoy writing that's been fluffed up a little, but the unfluffed style of your writing here is what makes it so amazing! Wish you were posting new stuff regularly here again! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[James]

Thanks, Margie, I wish I were too, but I don't really write much anymore. I seem to have lost whatever it was that made me enjoy it. I'm glad you liked this one. It's one of my favorites simply because I think it represents how I feel most of the time...unnoticeable, which isn't always a bad thing.

[Papaya]

easy to feel invisible sometimes.
and i wonder sometimes if being invisible is better than always being seen alone
because then everyone knows
you're alone
anyway, i like this and i like the dog and birds that keep me company

[James]

I wonder too, but I hate feeling alone and invisible

[Papaya]

well here you are not :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are born, we live, and we die...and we do wonder if we are ever noticed at all...
and when we leave this mortal coil, if anyone will remember that we stood in that spot that was our life.

i like this...more towards the top of that cliff at this point...starting to look down.