Dancing Fool

Dancing Fool

A Poem by James

Dress in a swirl  I'll give you a twirl
Swing you round then back to the ground
then back again with a count,
1, 2, 3
step
1, 2, 3
step
dip
twirl 
step... keeping time
with the caller's rhyme.
Heels tapping
and old men slapping
their knee's to the rhythm of a fiddlers beat.
I'm not much of a dancer
more of a tip-toeing prancer
But I love to move 
when I feel the groove.
No rhythm,
no grace
but I'm quick with the pace.
My steps may be false,
but I do love the waltz.
Bet you never knew 
that I was a dancing fool.
A good ol' boy who loves a girl
and wants nothing more 
than to give her a whirl;
to have her alone on a big dance floor
and dance all night till her feet are sore...
Just so I can take her home and rub them. 

© 2016 James


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LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! This is an awesome piece of rhythmic & lyrical wonder! I love that you bring in all kinds of dance moves & your rhyming is so perfect, kinda like an old-fashioned version of rap, the way your word crafting conveys a distinct beat, but with a more sincere & gentle & nostalgic message, instead of the usual harsh intensity of rap lyrics. This is definitely a home run! Fun to read & imagine!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked this. I wish I could dance, but it's not a pretty site when I try, although I use to.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

I wish I could've seen you back in your stompin' days *smile*



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LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! This is an awesome piece of rhythmic & lyrical wonder! I love that you bring in all kinds of dance moves & your rhyming is so perfect, kinda like an old-fashioned version of rap, the way your word crafting conveys a distinct beat, but with a more sincere & gentle & nostalgic message, instead of the usual harsh intensity of rap lyrics. This is definitely a home run! Fun to read & imagine!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked this. I wish I could dance, but it's not a pretty site when I try, although I use to.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

I wish I could've seen you back in your stompin' days *smile*
Love the last line !!! Music does quicken the pulse..and make the feet step lively.

This is fun, and reminds the reader of Joyful times..

I did enjoy !

Jazzy

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it.
J. J.  Nightingale

8 Years Ago

You are welcome....JJ
This was so much fun I danced right along with you!
Great poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it, but really, I'm the worst dancing partner ever.
Papaya

8 Years Ago

Most men don't dance so you're already better than most straight away...
love the ending....and i am a dancing fool, always was...so can relate to this much...not one for specific steps i always just moved to the music and let it take me where it would...much like writing this is...we start moving to the music of the words, and the beat of the poem finds itself.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

Sometimes I wish I could dance, I'm sure my wife does. Thank you for reading.
The pace and style are fitting of a dance. I like the narrator's clunky motions.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James

8 Years Ago

thanks, Clifford. Clunky is a good word for me on a dance floor.
Jacob Clifford

8 Years Ago

Ha! Join the club, my friend.

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Added on October 4, 2016
Last Updated on October 6, 2016
Tags: dance, love

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James

The Beach, NC



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