Misty Midnight Eyes (Acrostic)

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Misty midnight eyes stare at empty skies

Illusions of dreams and joyful memories 

Dancing on dying stars draped in purple lace

Nightly swordsman slay the moon and birth the sun

Igniting the celestial potter's furnace --

Gathering clay turned on wheels of polished stone

Hearts delicately smoothed by crafter's fingers

Together burn in the light of a nova 

Author's Note

An Acrostic with 11 syllables in each line.

Reviews

[Relic]

The first two lines seem to convey what is unknown to the eyes. The rest of the poem reveals what's really going on out there. I think this poem goes a lot deeper than what may appear at first glance if read too fast without paying attention. It really is a great little poem with even greater images of another world.

[James]

I'm glad you liked it, its the hardest thing I've ever written

[Relic]

I did. I think your hard work paid off.

[Valentine]

I never studied any kind of writing but you seemed to have accomplished just what you set out to do. I like the ideas I got reading the last 4 lines. Valentine

[James]

I've never studies any kind of writing either and have no idea if this is one, but it is the first time I wrote anything to a set of guide lines. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Tony Jordan]

Its a cut above - here - James.
(Jesus I wish Jimmy Durante would stop singing 'Frosty the snowman in my earphones ffs)

Dying stars will be the nurseries of the future and we carry the dead with us, in us.
Very skilfully crafted piece.

[Shabeeh Haider]

It is good to try various style of poetry. Not only have you written a beautiful Acrostic but you have indeed painted a wonderful picture with your words.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Mystical and awe-inspiring. It opens the mind up. Thank you for introducing me to an unfamiliar style of poetry. Brilliant!

[Lady C]

I love your acrostic...I can see passion in it...Misty Midnight eyes/Hearts delicately smoothed by crafter's fingers/Together burn in the light of Nova...
Am lost in your poem...

[Kelly Scheppers]

Nicely done, James! I've never attempted the acrostic form before, but I really liked the cosmic feel you gave this.

[Lydia Shutter]

Wonderful acrostic. Loved the celestial references. "hearts delicately smoothed by a crafter's fingers".....such a sensual line evoking tenderness. The imagery is stunning! Lydi**

[James]

Thank you, it's the hardest thing I've written, I'm glad you liked it.

[barleygirl]

This seems to be a poetic departure for you, as this is written in more of a formal, metaphorical way. I like the construction, love acrostics, especially when they flow without attention to the mechanics of your efforts (as you've done here). I'm not sure if all your metaphors sing the same chord here, but maybe I just need my 2nd cup of coffee to fire up my imagination a little better.

[James]

Hardest damn thing I've written in my life. When I sat down to do this I gave myself a syllable count (random) and stuck with it. I think there is a lost-love story buried in there somewhere, but I'm not really sure.

thanks for reading it.

[FJ Davis]

A lovely, image-rich acrostic.
This creation soars, James.
Excellent work!

[James]

thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed this.