Moveable Type

This poem is about watching the evolution of your artistry, in this case writing, while contrasting that with a lack of growth in your Self.

This link will bring you to the poem.

Author's Note

This poem is not at all where I want it to be. The repetition is intentional, but I've been struggling with this poem for weeks. I know it has some good lines, and some potential. But help with where it goes wrong and where it doesn't would really be appreciated.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This is art, music & poetry, come to life on a page. I love the nuances of it, the deep acceptance of your flaws and weaknesses. This is definitely growth and depth, there are subtleties and hard truths that come to light here. It's a bit difficult to read since it doesn't fit entirely on the page, but well worth the effort. Is the second part meant to be read in conjunction with the first...I saw the copyright and wasn't sure if it was two separate pieces. It's stunning, love the harshness and light touch in certain areas, although the format can be a bit tricky, still enjoyed it's little quirks, makes it all the more endearing.

[James William Dyer]

the copyright was there to indicate a separate section of the poem. Thank you for reading

[KAOlmsted]

I have to download some PDF thingie to see this (a little back story...my laptop crashed last week, I lost my hard drive, my awesome brother fixed it, but now I am in the process of getting everything I used to have back...please know I will download whatever the hell I need to, to read this ;-) I have a faint connection right now, though, and do not want to tempt fate xD Review is imminent...)

[James William Dyer]

if you download it, you can open it in Adobe Reader. I think Word opens .pdf files, too, as does OpenOffice.org. Thanx, yeah this one needs some work, but I'm sick of fighting it, better to shelve it and return to it later.....but it is better than Alchemy, and has potential. I know that

[James William Dyer]

your browser probably needs a plug-in

[KAOlmsted]

Yeah, I do need a plug in...oh wait, probably not what you meant xD

silly kimmer...read moreYeah, I do need a plug in...oh wait, probably not what you meant xD

silly kimmer...

I'll go someplace with a strong connection and download the s**t out of everything I need.

[eglantine]

It's always an interesting roller coaster ride for the eyes reading your poems. To me, the poem gets better as it goes on, the ending being the better part.

[James William Dyer]

thx

[AmongSavages]

I really like how your formatting gives your poem a voice. Your poetry is almost story-like; when I read it, I can see the images you're trying to create. Truly amazing poem.

[James William Dyer]

Totally ignore the formatting, if you will. I'm halfway through the process of formatting it, which is an entirely f&*cked process. Anyhow, I started wondering if this is even worth beating my head against any more, this particular piece, so mid-formatting I decided to throw it out here.