The Rungs of Heaven

A poem about the dangers lurking in the backs of our minds while we work, with subtle implications of suicide.

This should take you to the poem.

Author's Note

This poem has a high degree of Visualism, to such an extent I couldn't even attempt to copy and paste it, and it would have taken me hours to type it in. I've uploadded it as a PDF to DeviantArt.com. I feel very confident about this poem in particular, but really want some outside viewpoints on this. Please click the link in the boddy of this poem or go to
http://oragamithoughts.deviantart.com/art/The-Rungs-of-Heaven-333631772?ga_submit=10%3A1350853806

This poem is about the architectural aspect to suicide :). When you get to the web page, there is an image of the poem, go to the right side of the page and click where it says download file (it's a PDF) and the entire poem wil display in your browser. This isn't a prank, it would literally have been impossible for the software on Writer'sCafe to handle the structure. Please don't be frightened off by this, I know it's a pain just to read a poem. I think it's worth it, though. I think. Let me know if the link is broken or doesn't go to the intended web page.

Reviews

[James William Dyer]

This is so fucked. So fucked. I was rewriting this poem, I had just installed another sentence beginning in H, the last rung to the Ladder, when my phone starts ringing. I don't like being interrupted when I write, so I ignored it. It keeps ringing. Again and again and again and again. So pick up and start barking at the person on the other end......only to find out a friend and coworker of mine just Fell. Four stories down out on the peninsula we are working on. 32 years old, he's still alive....but I was on that roof, I was up there, I know how horrible of a fall. And his family. This is devastating. I hate this, these f*****g construction bosses, always safety last. Now a man's heart might stop cause some scumbag f*****g millionaire wanted his house done on schedule. How many horrible things can happen? Please think of this man and his loved ones tonight if you read this

[KAOlmsted]

Wow. Just. Wow. You take it to a whole new level, don't you. Everything I said about taking or leaving the formatting? Yeah...I can admit when I'm wrong. This was amazing, and I thank you so much for sharing the link. Extraordinary.

[Pratik]

Very impressive indeed.. i will be honest with you; I got distracted at first by your style of writing, but a second read made things clearer.... I actually love your style; very innovative... it seems to instill a different life into the words.... As far as the writing is concerned I think you did a great job in recreating the blunt emotions and the coldness that do justice to the centered theme... Well done :)

[justjenn_2u]

Your voice SCREAMS with your emotive, descriptive words. So deep that there is so much recognition deserved. MORE, MORE..

[Baby Ricochet]

James you have one of the most unique voices on the Cafe. Outstanding job.

[eglantine]

nice to see some writers who are not afraid to explore the keyboard. Nice work!

[Pax]

intriguing and very much creative display of words....

[GypsyAlien3303]

This is by far the coolest poem I have ever read. I've never seen this before. I really don't know much about poetry but I really like this. So creative! :)

[Ed Fagan]

Felt like I was back at work ... only I am lucky this week and only working off 24's and 32's definitively an interesting read.

[Steven]

Dude, very interesting stuff! I liked the H's blending into the ladder. The act itself all but spelled out, at, I'm thinking, the bottom of the ladder, and so, although this is a ladder to Heaven, the other end is the final destination, which must be Hell. I might be over-analyzing. Anyway, dug the concept, and the hardened visuals you painted. But, BUT! haha, you know I'm a contractor myself, so I'm going to be a f**k and tell you that it's 14.5" between studs--they are 16" on center. At any rate, great write.

[James William Dyer]

sixteen on center is right, just couldn't fit the syllables in there

[James William Dyer]

I do framing carpentry. The past week I;ve spent five stories up on homemade scaffolding.......it makes me literally sick in the morning before I go into work. I'm not afraid of heights, but it got me thinking strange s**t up there. I find myself taking twice my regular dose to keep the panic down on that f*****g pick

[Steven]

hahaha, yeah I know how that can be. Get some pump jacks homie

[James William Dyer]

I've got Valium :)

[Steven]

that's better :)