The Protege

A Collaboration with Tania Leigh

The final flicker of light from the candle
is reminiscent of the spark in your eye
that I study intently, as it fades to black
and by my own hand, I watch you die.

And here it is, my fate at last
brought forth 'neath that flickering flame.
My own eye looks unto the past
and tries to divine what you became.

What of me? You’d not possibly know. The
soullessness of me belies my eyes and you
were deceived by the inviting glow, an
unwitting performer in my macabre show.

My art I sought to teach you, the last
defense of an artists vanity, to see his
own lack of humanity passed to another,
you were a sacrifice to my hedonistic art.

Your strength was your weakness; your
desire to teach your art to me was an
open door and I stepped through. I do
believe the sacrifice in the end was you.

And now I fall 'neath your unwitting blade,
my body laid bare, the perfect canvas.
My soul cries out, guiding your hand.
Art is your master and your blade must obey.

You are a teacher in the perfect sense of your
sacrifice to this protégé, and the love of your
art becomes your demise as I put forth my new
skills and your life drains away. I must obey.

Oh, the wonders we have created, working
side by side. The masterpieces wrought of skin
and pain. I shudder with thought of our secret
sin and await the kiss of your final blade.

Reviews

[nokturnal]

That was incredible. So full of emotion and despair I loved the dialog between you and Tania very very creative. As I read it I could picture the whole scene playing out like it was right before my eyes. I give you two, two thumbs up a piece and kudos great job, great writing, just simply great.

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

Wow that is awesome I love the conversation back and forth between the two- sick and twisted as it is ; it is still a relationship and you describe it so well- this was an awesome collaboration. Great job!

[A.Crews]

i think this a great piece of literature. both writers worked very well together, the rhyme scheme was very heavy but tasteful, which is very hard to do. congrats.

[Papillion]

I liked the two perspective on this. Very well written!

[Paula M. Potter]

I thought this was great you almost could not tell it was done by two different people! I enjoyed this very much!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

excellent collaboration... your thoughts meshed so very well together... nicely done

[Brett Campaigne]

intriguing dialogue... really reveals the symbolic meaning behind such involving apprenticeships.

[Gary H]

Excellent - and a reminder to kick myself up the backside and go start working with other people again. There is nothing else I can add as I think this is really well done. My only thoughts are to do with how to write another with Natalie C that is as good as yours. Wow! What a challenge.

[Lea Jane]

WOAH. That was amazing. That captured me in the beginning and held me in right up until the end. Excellent work guys!

[TAYLOR]

i love collaborations and this one was so well done...two good writers doing awesome work ..this was fab

[Crystal]

This is awsome. I love the way the emotion jumps of the page. You two write very well together. Great write.