Fall Musings

Thoughts of Fall

A soft carress stirs leaves of golden red
Swaying in the gentle sunlight
Mournful of thier loss
Yet grateful for another day
Soon they will be reunited
Together once more
The wind stirs
The leaves shudder in tense anticipation
Who will be next
Does it matter
Soon they will be as one
And life will begin again
 

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

Interesting way to handle the ideas of loss, death, and redemption. It's got a lot of the elements of a pastoral or soft feel-good piece, but the use of "loss" and "tense" make sure we know that there's something else going on here. Solid little piece of writing.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

You can can just see the leaves falling and drifting through the air, as they tumble and crumble to the ground below. Good write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[desertraven]

Very well done! I really like this one! Going in fav's!
Sandra♥

[Crystal]

The poem has some sexual undertones, depending on how you look at it. But you have to have your mind in the gutter when you read the poem.

[Tania Leigh]

Beautiful, that you gave a human quality to nature...."Who will be next?" , like they are a group of little children

Well done!

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, I really enjoyed this piece. You should enter it into the "Seasons of Feeling" contest.

Seasons of Feelings

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is a really good poem... I like your wording.... "The leaves shudder in tense anticipation" good discriptions.... Great job!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Wonderful choice in words in this piece....very well written.

[Leigha Hoffner]

thank you submission what a wonderful poem

[Jazlean]

I like this, great word choice with each word carefully selected and holds the reader. It painted a pretty picture in my head of loss and sadness but also hope.
nice write.
well done,
~Jazlean

[V. Lucien Maier]

good write. nice set up and the descriptions are well done.
the flow is good, although short.