I vant your blud

I vant your blud

A Poem by Jimmy Greenie
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A poem about a vampire

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Alone, lost, she knows not what to do,
She can't go out in public,
People shun her for what she is,
It's like she is sick

 

There's a man there,
His face brightly lit,
She doesn't want to.
But she needs it

 

She steps out of the shadows,
And grabs him round the neck
Her fangs are ready, she can already taste it,
She stabs him in the neck,


She sucks the blood out,
It's too late now,
She can't stop drinking,
She wants to know how


How she can do this,
Why she does it,
What went wrong,
She just wants to dig herself a pit.

© 2010 Jimmy Greenie


Author's Note

Jimmy Greenie
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I ave never read a piece on here that told the story of the vampire's thist fromt he point of view of the vampire. It was refreshing to read. I'm sorry ou didn't finish this in time to enter the contest I'm sure it would have done well. I saw a few small things that you might concider changing,
Alone, lost, she know not what to do, ~ know should be knows
She want to know how ~ want should be wants

Other then those two smallt hings this is a perfect write.



Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I ave never read a piece on here that told the story of the vampire's thist fromt he point of view of the vampire. It was refreshing to read. I'm sorry ou didn't finish this in time to enter the contest I'm sure it would have done well. I saw a few small things that you might concider changing,
Alone, lost, she know not what to do, ~ know should be knows
She want to know how ~ want should be wants

Other then those two smallt hings this is a perfect write.



Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ohhhhh mew that scares me!! love it...love it! more please!!!! x0x00x0x0

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice write on blood suckers

Tony

Posted 15 Years Ago


I agree with Sheila, James, a very nicely penned piece on those vamps of the night
blood suckers that they are... soo sorry you missed contest, next time, perhaps




Posted 15 Years Ago


Oooooooh, those blood sucking vamps....will get you when you least expect it!!
Nice write...sorry you missed the contest, but glad you shared it with us!!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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