Suicide

old thoughts

As I watch the blood drain from my wrists

I relize I may have cut to deep this time

yet I can't remember if I meant to or not

but as I feel the life draining from my

body releasing me from my pain of heartbreak and sorrow

Im writting these last words

in hope that i might be remembered

as a good guy

Reviews

[Brookell▲]

I take an interest in what is written. But I think if you would've put it together in a different manner, I think it would benefit the poem for the better.

[J.A.N]

"I realize I may have cut to deep
this time, yet I can't remember
if I meant to or not."

Amazing line, escape,
release, I can feel it through your words.

"remembered as a good guy."
We live our lives, sometimes,
or mostly, try to please who we can.
Doing good, trying so hard, not to let
them see a frown upon your face.
And after you've gone, what's truly remembered
of you, the good you've done, or the pain left behind?
Nevertheless, great write.
-j

[Hello, Goodbye]

this makes me recall days when I use to write about death and hoping to receive it.. I see that you wrote its 'old thoughts' so hopefully despondency doesn't have you in this place, still..