The Most Beautiful Girl In The World

The Most Beautiful Girl In The World


I kissed the most beautiful girl in the world
She just gave a piercing look that said my soul hates your soul.
I loved the most beautiful girl in the world
And she squashed me like an ant
And left me at the ninth gate of Dante�s Inferno.
I fucked the most beautiful girl in the world
Who held her eyes closed�tight!
As she wished her legs were at that very moment,
Who didn�t make a noise and left quickly
As if a door was opening on a packed subway car in Tokyo.
I killed the most beautiful girl in the world and she just laughed
And laughed and finally cried at how pathetic I am.

Reviews

[Yereziah]

Damn that sucked lol but I like it... true emotions without too much word playing
love the part about Dante's 9th gate...

[RachelleB]

pretty cool and different...very raw...if it's true, that must have sucked!!

[Heart Of A Wolf]

Very interesting piece of work here edmund. Keep it up.

[Freedom]

i agree with lily...this is very honest and raw. Despite the rough syntax and realistic diction, this is a very beautiful portrayal of human emotion..and a difficult one at that! This doesnt show simple rejection. It shows the necessity to be with someone even on the occasion that that someone has openly decided they didn't want it. That's a very touchy emotion..hard to understand..VERY hard to portray. You did a fantastic job. The diction fits the tone perfectly, as well as the syntax.

[Lily1111]

I like the raw honesty portrayed in this piece through the emotion of feeling rejected.

[Berserker[Diktator Von ..]

This was a great piece....i thoroughly enjoyed reading it...Great job...keep up the good work....=)

[emz]

Just hd to say your cat is soooo beautiful.... x

[emz]

very powerful and well written poem.. i enjoyed this thanks



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[Fran Marie]

Many emotions surface thru~ out this poignant verse, so very deeply expressed and well penned~

THanks for sharing~Fran Marie