I Had A Piece Of You

I had a piece of you



I had a piece of you
And I want it back.
You had a piece of me
And you shattered that-
What's left is a disbelief
In that person I thought I knew,
All goes to show that some things
Are just too good to be true
All that glitters is not gold,
That is the Shakespeare adage of the old
What goes up must come down-
With a resounding thunderclap
Upon my hollow ground-
One must pick up the pieces
And rebuild anew
These life-learned lessons
On our souls journey
We must go through.

Reviews

[woodennymph]

i think you did a great job in exploring and expressing disillusionment. i can really relate to this piece and i believe the emotions here. i also liked the fact that you resolved the poem in the end, you gave this message and you did not stick to remaining disillusioned. the length is adequate and the word use is really good. nice job!

[emz]

yes this does reflect my poem moving on.... i liked this it really conveys the hurt and pain love can cause


lovely


x

[Pointblank]

I dont know...must we go through such heartbreak sometimes? You wanted her back after she shattered you? It is the story of life..wanting what we cannot have. This one made me think. I like when that happens. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

All that glitters is not gold,
That is the Shakespeare adage of the old
What goes up must come down-
With a resounding thunderclap
Upon my hollow ground-
One must pick up the pieces
And rebuild anew

An Excellent write, Edmond, which shows deep emotions spilling forth~
Once again WS knew what he was taliking about."all that glitters is not gold"
to be sure~ this poem flows with lovely poetic expression showing hopeful glimmers of renewal
towards the end~" all's well that ends well" I should think~WeLL DonE!!~Fran Marie